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This post has in-line assessment comments.Thu Sep 05, 2019 11:56 am

Steam Power Robo


Fighting Style: Steam Power Robo
Weapon Utilization: Though weapons can be incorporated into the style, it doesn't revolve around them.
Description: By using Issen’s steam powered cyborg implants, he’s able to achieve feats of movement and unnatural athleticism otherwise impossible for plain humans. This steam can also be manipulated in small ways to create effects useful in battles. The steam is naturally recharged by moisture in the air.

Toggled and Passive Abilities:
Overheat [Toggle] - The user retains all steam that would be otherwise released. This causes the character to overheat, giving him a 20% Attack bonus, costing a 20% Defense debuff. While this toggle is active, Puff Puff is not.

Hyper Focus [Toggle] - The user’s cyborg enhancements give them the ability to perfectly recall all the things they’ve experienced. By overclocking this ability, their perception is increased for a short time, giving a 10% Reflex bonus, costing 10% to Willpower.



Techniques



Light Techniques:

Medium Techniques:

Heavy Techniques:

AoE Techniques:






Last edited by Issen Hachiyo on Thu Sep 05, 2019 2:46 pm; edited 1 time in total
Gray
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The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
[[strollingdeath]][[baneoftheweak]][[riseandshine]][[childofdestiny]][[freakofnature]]
[[punchoutguru]][[dulcetvirtuoso]]

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Posts : 3900

Steam Power Robo Empty Re: Steam Power Robo

This post has in-line assessment comments.Thu Sep 05, 2019 2:16 pm
[ Hi Issen. Good work getting this done so quickly! I have some comments below, so please check them out and make changes accordingly. The comments are marked in red. ]

Issen Hachiyo wrote:

Steam Power Robo


Fighting Style: Steam Power Robo
Weapon Utilization: Though weapons can be incorporated into the style, it doesn't revolve around them.
Description: By using Issen’s steam powered cyborg implants, he’s able to achieve feats of movement and unnatural athleticism otherwise impossible for plain humans. This steam can also be manipulated in small ways to create effects useful in battles. The steam is naturally recharged by moisture in the air.

Toggled and Passive Abilities: List any and all passive abilities and properties your devil fruit/fighting style gives you. This cannot include any damage-dealing special attacks, as those will be included under techniques. Passive/toggled abilities cannot give buffs/debuffs higher than 20%. You may have no more than 2 buffing/debuffing toggled abilities. [ Please remove this paragraph. ]

Puff Puff - Use of abilities creates a translucent steam cloud that reduces the Reflex stat of any caught in the cloud by 5 and causing a visual obstruction. This steam can be easily dispersed by concussive, gusting or explosive force. It naturally fades after a single round of posts. [ Your passives cannot have combat mechanical effects. Please remove this or turn it into a toggle that follows a similar format to Overheat. All of our toggles are standardised, so they cannot have custom effects like this or the one you've written for Perfect Memory. ]

Overheat [Toggle] - The user retains all steam that would be otherwise released. This causes the character to overheat, giving him a 20% Attack bonus, costing a 20% Durability [ I'm assuming you mean Defense here? Please change the wording to use the terminology from the combat guide. ] debuff. While this toggle is active, Puff Puff is not.

Perfect Memory - The user’s cyborg enhancements give them the ability to perfectly recall all the things they’ve experienced. The third time the same ability is used against them in the same thread, the user has advantage on Reflex Check rolls. [ You will have to remove this passive. See my comment for Puff Puff. ]





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Steam Power Robo Empty Re: Steam Power Robo

This post has in-line assessment comments.Thu Sep 05, 2019 2:46 pm
Edited according to comments made. Thanks for the precise help!
Gray
Gray
The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
[[strollingdeath]][[baneoftheweak]][[riseandshine]][[childofdestiny]][[freakofnature]]
[[punchoutguru]][[dulcetvirtuoso]]

[[improviseadaptovercome]]
Posts : 3900

Steam Power Robo Empty Re: Steam Power Robo

This post has in-line assessment comments.Thu Sep 05, 2019 2:58 pm
Thanks for the quick changes. Approved!


Issen Hachiyo wrote:

Steam Power Robo


Fighting Style: Steam Power Robo
Weapon Utilization: Though weapons can be incorporated into the style, it doesn't revolve around them.
Description: By using Issen’s steam powered cyborg implants, he’s able to achieve feats of movement and unnatural athleticism otherwise impossible for plain humans. This steam can also be manipulated in small ways to create effects useful in battles. The steam is naturally recharged by moisture in the air.

Toggled and Passive Abilities:
Overheat [Toggle] - The user retains all steam that would be otherwise released. This causes the character to overheat, giving him a 20% Attack bonus, costing a 20% Defense debuff. While this toggle is active, Puff Puff is not.

Hyper Focus [Toggle] - The user’s cyborg enhancements give them the ability to perfectly recall all the things they’ve experienced. By overclocking this ability, their perception is increased for a short time, giving a 10% Reflex bonus, costing 10% to Willpower.



Techniques



Light Techniques:

Medium Techniques:

Heavy Techniques:

AoE Techniques:




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