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Anton La'croix
Tracker

Name : Anton La'croix
Epithet : Screaming Grasshopper
Age : 23
Height : 5'9''
Weight : 186lb
Species : Human
Faction : Marine
World Position : Rear Admiral
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Crew Role : Captain
Devil Fruit : Bug-Bug Fruit, Model: Grasshopper
Haki Level : 5
Hitpoints (HP) : 270
Attack (ATK) : 360
Defense (DEF) : 340
Reflex (RX) : 380
Willpower (WP) : 340
Level : 58
Experience Points : 5807
Income Multiplier : +43%
Berries Berries : 187,640,000
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Thu Oct 22, 2020 10:35 am
Anton La'croix uses
Soul Shrirk - HT at Nise no Akuma
Snap Kick - LT at Nise no Akuma
UT at Nise no Akuma

Nise no Akuma uses
MT at Anton
LT at Anton
LT at Anton
UT at Anton
NPC
Name : Variable
Epithet : Variable
Age : 0
Height : Variable
Weight : Variable
Species : Variable
Faction : Variable
Crew : Variable
Ship : Variable
Crew Role : Variable
Devil Fruit : Variable
Haki Level : 0
Hitpoints (HP) : 0
Attack (ATK) : 0
Defense (DEF) : 0
Reflex (RX) : 0
Willpower (WP) : 0
Level : 0
Experience Points : 0
Bounty : Variable
Berries Berries : Variable
Posts : 1096
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Thu Oct 22, 2020 10:35 am
The member 'Anton La'croix' has done the following action : Dice Roll


#1 'Reflex Check' : 20, 12, 3

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#2 'Reflex Check' : 8, 19, 5, 7
Anton La'croix
Tracker

Name : Anton La'croix
Epithet : Screaming Grasshopper
Age : 23
Height : 5'9''
Weight : 186lb
Species : Human
Faction : Marine
World Position : Rear Admiral
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Crew Role : Captain
Devil Fruit : Bug-Bug Fruit, Model: Grasshopper
Haki Level : 5
Hitpoints (HP) : 270
Attack (ATK) : 360
Defense (DEF) : 340
Reflex (RX) : 380
Willpower (WP) : 340
Level : 58
Experience Points : 5807
Income Multiplier : +43%
Berries Berries : 187,640,000
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Fri Oct 23, 2020 9:49 pm
Nise was fuming with rage. The wounds that Anton were inflicting on him were starting to add up. This was ridiculous! He was supposed to be a weak, scared little thing. Hell, that last strike with his axe should have cleaved him in half. Instead, he was standing before him, looking in much better condition than himself. To make things even more aggravating, the cheers of support from the marines were getting on his already frayed nerves.

The cyborg let out a roar of blind fury, swinging out with his axe. "YOU DAMN MISERABLE BUG!" He bellowed, Anton jumping back to avoid the blade [Akuma's MT, miss] Akuma charged after him, pressing the offensive. "I AM NISE NO AKUMA OF DEMONS REVOLT!" He swung a fist, narrowly missing as Anton jumped to the side. [Akuma's LT, miss] "YOU'RE JUST A GOD DAMN NO NAME MARINE!" He swung back, missing again as Anton ducked down. [Akuma's UT, miss] "YOU'RE SUPPOSED TO DIE. JUST DIE ALREADY!" He lunged forward, sending his body crashing into Anton, knocking him back. [Akuma's LT, hit]

Anton slid back, managing to remain on his feet. The marine was quiet for a moment, as Akuma stood there, panting heavily in anger.

"Are you done?" Anton muttered, standing up straight and glaring right at Akuma. "Because you know what? I'm getting really sick of this whole "Let's kill Anton" theme that's been going on lately."

He took a step forward.

"First it was those assassins. Can you imagine that? A group of murderous lunatics hired to kill you for no reason? And now, when I finally get a chance to relax, your big metal ass turns up, trying to take my head off. And why? Because of a job I didn't even damn want in the first place!"

Another step forward.

"So you think you have problems? Well, here's my rebuttal. " Anton took a deep breath.

"Cover your ears!" Dr Black yelled, as every marine clamped their hands to their ears.

The shriek that followed echoed throughout the entire island. Frustration built up over a career unleashed all at once. It ran through Akuma's body, sending his internal working haywire. There was no real pain, just something that shook up his very core.

The silence that followed was deafening. Anton stood there, panting heavily, while Akuma was frozen in place, shaking. [Soul Shriek - HT, hit] Slowly, Dr Black uncovered his ears. "Feel better?" Anton paused for a moment. "Actually...yeah."

Then Anton shot forward, delivering a sharp kick to Akuma's face, followed by one to the stomach, knocking the cyborg onto his backside. [Snap Kick - LT, hit] [Anton's UT, hit]

COMBAT TRACKERS:
PLAYER STATS:

(List the current values for your stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

HP: 192/260 (-11 (LT))
ATK: 356/340 (340+16)
DEF: 352/320 (320+32)
RX: 372/340 (340+32)
WP: 320

PLAYER RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list your current RX% and DMG% against them.)

vs. Nise no Akuma
RX%: 174
DMG%: 103



USED 3 TECHNIQUES | 0 TOGGLES | 0 HAKI:

(List all techniques (including UTs), toggles, and types of haki used/activated this turn and their effects.)

TECHNIQUES
Soul Shriek | HT | hit | Stat Morph | -75% Will | Nise no Akuma
Snap Kick | LT | hit | Flat | 10 | Nise no Akuma
UT | hit | Flat | 5 | Nise no Akuma


TOGGLES
{toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
{haki name} | {haki effect}

2 TECHNIQUES ACTIVE | 0 TOGGLES | 2 HAKI ACTIVE:

(List all techniques that have currently active effects and indicate the remaining duration. Also, indicate what effects they are dealing: e.g. DoT value, Stat Morph value.)

TECHNIQUES
Soul Shriek | -75% Will | 4
B-Flat | -30% Ref | 1


TOGGLES
{active toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
Kenbonshoku | +32 Ref | 1
Bosushoku | +32 Def, +16 Att | 1

6 TECHNIQUES COOLING DOWN | 0 HAKI COOLING DOWN:

(List all techniques and haki that are currently on cooldown and note the number of rounds before you can use them again.)

TECHNIQUES
Snap Kick | 2
Grand Strike | 5
Shed Skin | 3
Fast Hopping | 2
Bad Vibrations | 2
Great Spear | 1


HAKI
{haki type} | {cooldown left}

CREW COMPANION STATS:

(List the current values of your Crew Companions for the stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

{Companion name}
Level:
HP:
ATK:
DEF:
RX:
WP:


{Companion name}
Level:
HP:
ATK:
DEF:
RX:
WP:



CREW COMPANION RATIOS:

(For each one of your Crew Companions, list their current RX% and DMG% against their opponents.)

{Companion name} vs. {opponent name}
RX%:
DMG%:



CREW COMPANION TECHNIQUES USED:

(List the class, type, damage/effects, and target of techniques used by your Crew NPCs.)

{Companion name}
{class} | {hit/miss} | {type} | {damage/effects} | {target}


{Companion name}
{class} | {hit/miss} | {type} | {damage/effects} | {target}



OPPONENT STATS:

(For each one of your opponents, list the current values for the stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

Nise no Akuma
Level: 63
HP: 26/310 (-157 (HT, debuff) -10 (LT) -5 (UT))
ATK: 395
DEF: 345
RX: 217/280 (280-63)
WP: 105/420 (420-315)



OPPONENT RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list their current RX% and DMG% against you and your Crew Companions.)

Nise no Akuma vs. Anton La'croix
RX%: 58
DMG%: 112



OPPONENT TECHNIQUES USED:

(List the class, damage, and target of techniques used by each one of your opponents if you or your Crew Companions are the direct targets.)

Nise no Akuma
MT | miss |  N/A | Anton
LT | hit |  11 | Anton
LT | miss |  N/A | Anton
UT | miss |  N/A | Anton



Ryoichi Ayugai
Tracker

Name : Ryoichi Ayugai
Epithet : The Bear
Age : 22
Height : 6 feet 1 inch (1.85m)
Weight : 198 lbs (95kg)
Species : Human
Faction : Marines
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Marine Rank : Petty Officer
Crew Role : Gunner
Devil Fruit : Kuma-Kuma no Mi (Bear-Bear Fruit) Model: Polar Bear
Haki Level : 1
Hitpoints (HP) : 163
Attack (ATK) : 135
Defense (DEF) : 120
Reflex (RX) : 140
Willpower (WP) : 125
Level : 14
Experience Points : 1478
Income Multiplier : +13%
Berries Berries : 1,300,000
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Tue Oct 27, 2020 9:28 am
Ryoichi moved backwards a bit, sitting down onto a bench. His body slowly becoming smaller again, his body losing the blood stained white fur he was covered with due to his hybrid form of Polar bear zoan. He would take in a deep breath, trying to regain his calm and slow his pulse down. It was obvious that had been a hardest fight he has had in a while. Quite possible his last hard fight was to regain his boxing title. Even if he did deactivate his form, his inuries remained, which lead the closest medic to rush over to him to start checking out the wounds.

Atleast 10 marines ran over to the beaten metal bear. They were ready to arrest him and be ready to deliver him away to the prison. Their attempt was disturbed however. It wasn't because of the beaten bear, it wasn't also because of the metal demon. It was instead by the shout from Dr. Black, asking everyone to cover their ears.

Ryoichi blinked at the demand, until he saw everyone else cover their ears aswell, which lead him to do the same. Thank god he did that, because if he hadn't, he would have heard a loud deafening shrieking noise which Anton had created. Luckily the shriek did not last too long and everyone could uncover their ears soon. Ryoichi couldn't help but blink at that. Marines on his side of the "battleground" could continue their duties: nearby medic checking Ryoichi's wounds, and the 10 marines continuing their arrest on knocked out metal bear. While Ryoichi was being patched up, he kept looking at the other fight that was still going on. His eyes focused at it, inspecting every move done. In his head, he was thinking of another battle plan for himself in case Anton requires assistance. But as it seemed right now, all was under controll.
Anton La'croix
Tracker

Name : Anton La'croix
Epithet : Screaming Grasshopper
Age : 23
Height : 5'9''
Weight : 186lb
Species : Human
Faction : Marine
World Position : Rear Admiral
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Crew Role : Captain
Devil Fruit : Bug-Bug Fruit, Model: Grasshopper
Haki Level : 5
Hitpoints (HP) : 270
Attack (ATK) : 360
Defense (DEF) : 340
Reflex (RX) : 380
Willpower (WP) : 340
Level : 58
Experience Points : 5807
Income Multiplier : +43%
Berries Berries : 187,640,000
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Wed Oct 28, 2020 5:57 am
Anton La'croix uses
Sonic Cutter - MT at Nise no Akuma
Hopper Kick - LT at Nise no Akuma
Grind Slash - LT at Nise no Akuma
UT at Nise no Akuma

Nise no Akuma uses
MT at Anton
LT at Anton
LT at Anton
UT at Anton
NPC
Name : Variable
Epithet : Variable
Age : 0
Height : Variable
Weight : Variable
Species : Variable
Faction : Variable
Crew : Variable
Ship : Variable
Crew Role : Variable
Devil Fruit : Variable
Haki Level : 0
Hitpoints (HP) : 0
Attack (ATK) : 0
Defense (DEF) : 0
Reflex (RX) : 0
Willpower (WP) : 0
Level : 0
Experience Points : 0
Bounty : Variable
Berries Berries : Variable
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Wed Oct 28, 2020 5:57 am
The member 'Anton La'croix' has done the following action : Dice Roll


#1 'Reflex Check' : 17, 6, 15, 20

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#2 'Reflex Check' : 10, 3, 14, 8
Anton La'croix
Tracker

Name : Anton La'croix
Epithet : Screaming Grasshopper
Age : 23
Height : 5'9''
Weight : 186lb
Species : Human
Faction : Marine
World Position : Rear Admiral
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Crew Role : Captain
Devil Fruit : Bug-Bug Fruit, Model: Grasshopper
Haki Level : 5
Hitpoints (HP) : 270
Attack (ATK) : 360
Defense (DEF) : 340
Reflex (RX) : 380
Willpower (WP) : 340
Level : 58
Experience Points : 5807
Income Multiplier : +43%
Berries Berries : 187,640,000
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Thu Oct 29, 2020 5:09 am
Nise no Akuma couldn't stop trembling, as he tried to pull himself to his feet. What was with this guy? He just wouldn't go down. And that shriek...it had done something to his systems. He was barely able to keep himself going. More importantly, all that anger, all that bravado, had been replaced by a feeling of pure dread.

He brought his eyes up, widening in fright as he saw Anton approaching. "G-Get away from me!" he yelled out, stumbling back as he swung his axe at him. In his panic, the massive weapon flew out of his hands, causing it to fly past him. The marines had to dive for cover as the weapon crashed into the wall. [Akuma's MT, miss]

Anton continued to advance, as if not even phased by the attack. This just caused Akuma to panic even more. In desperation, he swung a massive, metal fist out. "STAY AWAY!" Anton's leg met the fist with aloud clang, kicking it away and leaving a crackling dent in the metal. [Akuma's LT, miss] [Hopper Kick - MT, hit]

"By the way," Anton said, preparing his blade, "Not sure if you know this, but Nise no Akuma? It translates to FAKE demon, not metal!"

Anton swung his blade. From this close, the arc of blade couldn't miss the large cyborg. Nise no Akuma let out a bellow of pain as blood and oil sprayed everywhere. [Sonic Cutter - MT, hit]

The cyborg stood for ccx a moment, barely keeping himself upright, as if his mind and body hadn't quite caught up with events yet.

"Fake...demon?"

And with that, Nise no Akuma collapsed to the floor with a thud. Silence fell over the area. Then, Anton took a deep breath.

"Is there anyone else that want6to take a shot at me!?" he yelled out into the air. Silence was the only response.

"Alright then!"

COMBAT TRACKERS:
PLAYER STATS:

(List the current values for your stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

HP: 181/260 (-11 (LT))
ATK: 356/340 (340+16)
DEF: 352/320 (320+32)
RX: 372/340 (340+32)
WP: 320

PLAYER RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list your current RX% and DMG% against them.)

vs. Nise no Akuma
RX%: 174
DMG%: 103



USED 4 TECHNIQUES | 0 TOGGLES | 0 HAKI:

(List all techniques (including UTs), toggles, and types of haki used/activated this turn and their effects.)

TECHNIQUES
Sonic Cutter | MT | hit | Flat | 20 | Nise no Akuma
Hopper Kick | LT | hit | Flat | 10 | Nise no Akuma
Grind Slash | LT | hit | Flat | 10 | Nise no Akuma
UT | hit | Flat | 7 | Nise no Akuma


TOGGLES
{toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
{haki name} | {haki effect}

1 TECHNIQUES ACTIVE | 0 TOGGLES | 0 HAKI ACTIVE:

(List all techniques that have currently active effects and indicate the remaining duration. Also, indicate what effects they are dealing: e.g. DoT value, Stat Morph value.)

TECHNIQUES
Soul Shriek | -75% Will | 3


TOGGLES
{active toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
{haki name} | {haki effect} | {haki duration}

9 TECHNIQUES COOLING DOWN | 2 HAKI COOLING DOWN:

(List all techniques and haki that are currently on cooldown and note the number of rounds before you can use them again.)

TECHNIQUES
B-Flat | 12
Sonic Cutter | 4
Hopper Kick | 2
Grind Slash | 2
Snap Kick | 1
Grand Strike | 4
Shed Skin | 2
Fast Hopping | 1
Bad Vibrations | 1


HAKI
Kenbonshoku | 10
Bosushoku | 10

CREW COMPANION STATS:

(List the current values of your Crew Companions for the stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

{Companion name}
Level:
HP:
ATK:
DEF:
RX:
WP:


{Companion name}
Level:
HP:
ATK:
DEF:
RX:
WP:



CREW COMPANION RATIOS:

(For each one of your Crew Companions, list their current RX% and DMG% against their opponents.)

{Companion name} vs. {opponent name}
RX%:
DMG%:



CREW COMPANION TECHNIQUES USED:

(List the class, type, damage/effects, and target of techniques used by your Crew NPCs.)

{Companion name}
{class} | {hit/miss} | {type} | {damage/effects} | {target}


{Companion name}
{class} | {hit/miss} | {type} | {damage/effects} | {target}



OPPONENT STATS:

(For each one of your opponents, list the current values for the stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

Nise no Akuma
Level: 63
HP: 0/310 (-20 (MT) -20 (LT) -7 (UT))
ATK: 395
DEF: 345
RX: 217/280 (280-63)
WP: 105/420 (420-315)



OPPONENT RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list their current RX% and DMG% against you and your Crew Companions.)

Nise no Akuma vs. Anton La'croix
RX%: 58
DMG%: 112



OPPONENT TECHNIQUES USED:

(List the class, damage, and target of techniques used by each one of your opponents if you or your Crew Companions are the direct targets.)

Nise no Akuma
MT | miss |  N/A | Anton
LT | miss |  N/A | Anton
LT | hit |  11 | Anton
UT | miss |  N/A | Anton



Ryoichi Ayugai
Tracker

Name : Ryoichi Ayugai
Epithet : The Bear
Age : 22
Height : 6 feet 1 inch (1.85m)
Weight : 198 lbs (95kg)
Species : Human
Faction : Marines
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Marine Rank : Petty Officer
Crew Role : Gunner
Devil Fruit : Kuma-Kuma no Mi (Bear-Bear Fruit) Model: Polar Bear
Haki Level : 1
Hitpoints (HP) : 163
Attack (ATK) : 135
Defense (DEF) : 120
Reflex (RX) : 140
Willpower (WP) : 125
Level : 14
Experience Points : 1478
Income Multiplier : +13%
Berries Berries : 1,300,000
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Sun Nov 01, 2020 12:29 pm
As his wounds were being dealt with by a beatuiful medical lady, his attention still remained at the battle that was going on between the demon and Anton. Although he had not met Anton before in his life, it did not surprise Ryoichi to see him defeat the demon very shortly after he had defeated the bear.

He let out a sigh of relief. The fight was over without his higher up receiving any injuries, but he was also relieved that he didn't need to go fight any further. With his current wounds, it would not have been that enjoyable, but doable never the less.

He winched for a moment as the medic was cleaning his wounds with alcoholic rub, but only for a moment as he then turned his head, looking around the party hall. He scanned his surrounding to see if anything looked out of place, if anyone didn't look like a marine, but instead looked like a guy who would be up to no good.

His scanning didn't give him any results. It seemed that the only two bad guys in this intrusion were the fake demon and bear. Ryoichi couldn't help but smile at it. He finally could have some peace again and keep on the relaxing party. His happy feeling turned into another winch again then as he felt slight pain from the wound cleaning.

Ryoichi blinked at the medic. Earlier he was too busy being focused on his duty, that he didn't notice the beautiful medic. But now, he couldn't help but grin, "Hello sugar. What say we go and have a small drink after this?" Ryoichi asked with full confidence from the lady, clearly trying to flirt, even if the line was very generic and boring.

The beautiful medic grinned a bit herself, only to then inflict a bit more pain with cleaning the wounds. Ryoichi couldn't help but flinch at it, "Ow ow ow ow.." he said out from the pain. A second later, the lady showed his left hand, which had a ring on the finger. It was clear that the lady was married. "Oh drats.. Not again.." Ryoichi mumbled at that, but then chuckled. Clearly this rejection did not faze him, probably was not his first nor last. He nodded his head with a smile at the medic and allowed her to continue with her duty on patching him back up.
Anton La'croix
Tracker

Name : Anton La'croix
Epithet : Screaming Grasshopper
Age : 23
Height : 5'9''
Weight : 186lb
Species : Human
Faction : Marine
World Position : Rear Admiral
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Crew Role : Captain
Devil Fruit : Bug-Bug Fruit, Model: Grasshopper
Haki Level : 5
Hitpoints (HP) : 270
Attack (ATK) : 360
Defense (DEF) : 340
Reflex (RX) : 380
Willpower (WP) : 340
Level : 58
Experience Points : 5807
Income Multiplier : +43%
Berries Berries : 187,640,000
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Wed Nov 04, 2020 8:59 am
Anton let out a small sigh. The fight was over, the criminal was down, andas far as he knew, nobody died. Well, there were plenty of injured marines, but no deaths at least. He flinched lightly when he felt an arm on his shoulder, spinning around to see the masked face of Dr. Black. "Alright then, let's get you patched up, shall we?"

Anton shook his head. "I'll be fine. Tend to the others. How are the new guys?" Dr. Black gestured to his staff, tending to the wounded. "My staff are already on it sir." Both looked over to see Ryoichis rejection by private Malory. "Mr Ayugai seems to be fine. As for the young lady, I'm not sure where she is. Perhaps she left when the fighting started."

Well, that was certainly disappointing. Anton would have to mention that to the higher ups. He didn't like the thought of doing that though.

"Anton! You're going to want to see this!"

Anton blinked, before limping over towards the fallen body of Akuma. Celia was standing beside him, looking down at one of his arms. As Anton approached, she pointed. "Look familiar?"

Anton looked at the arm. On it was a tattoo of sorts, a symbol he recognized. The letters "RA" with what appeared to be a demonic skull between them. "The revolutionary army?" Anton breathed. Celia nodded. [color:bacf=666633]"Though it's strange. It looks different. I thought the symbol featured a dragon, not a demon." Anton looked at the shorter woman. [color:bacf=006600]"He also mentioned something called Demons Revolt. Ring any bells?" Celia shook her head. "I'll have someone look into it."

As several marines bound Akuma's body and began to drag him away, Anton approached Ryoichi. "How are you holding up?"
Ryoichi Ayugai
Tracker

Name : Ryoichi Ayugai
Epithet : The Bear
Age : 22
Height : 6 feet 1 inch (1.85m)
Weight : 198 lbs (95kg)
Species : Human
Faction : Marines
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Marine Rank : Petty Officer
Crew Role : Gunner
Devil Fruit : Kuma-Kuma no Mi (Bear-Bear Fruit) Model: Polar Bear
Haki Level : 1
Hitpoints (HP) : 163
Attack (ATK) : 135
Defense (DEF) : 120
Reflex (RX) : 140
Willpower (WP) : 125
Level : 14
Experience Points : 1478
Income Multiplier : +13%
Berries Berries : 1,300,000
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Wed Nov 04, 2020 4:17 pm
Ryoichi would immediately stand up as Anton had approached him. Clearly he did that from respect. "I am all okay ma'am! I hope everything is okay with you." He said out as he was standing. This however angered the medic who was tending his wounds. She immediately pulled Ryoichi back down onto his seat and then did a gentle smack over the back of his head.

"It's not a ma'am. He's a he!" the medic said with lower tone to Ryoichi, moving her hand then to gently mock smack over the back of his head again. Ryoichi blinked. This entire time he had thought his higher up is a she. He could not help but stand up again and bow infront of Anton "My deepest apologise!" he said to him with apologetic manner.

It clearly seemed like a nice gesture from him, but him standing up again, once again, angered the medic, who then pulled Ryoichi back down onto his seat and immeditately smacked the back of his head again. This time a bit harder. "I told you to sit your ass down!" the lady medic said with angered tone before she continued to tend his wounds. Ryoichi couldn't help but blink, although he felt some pain in his head from three smacks he received.

"If a fake bear wont hospitalize me. Her temper deffinetly will." he smiled as he said that, remaining to have his wounds tended. His face turned a bit serious for a moment as he looked at Anton again, hoping to get some answers to his following question. "Any idea who they were?"
Anton La'croix
Tracker

Name : Anton La'croix
Epithet : Screaming Grasshopper
Age : 23
Height : 5'9''
Weight : 186lb
Species : Human
Faction : Marine
World Position : Rear Admiral
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Crew Role : Captain
Devil Fruit : Bug-Bug Fruit, Model: Grasshopper
Haki Level : 5
Hitpoints (HP) : 270
Attack (ATK) : 360
Defense (DEF) : 340
Reflex (RX) : 380
Willpower (WP) : 340
Level : 58
Experience Points : 5807
Income Multiplier : +43%
Berries Berries : 187,640,000
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Wed Nov 11, 2020 9:16 pm
Well, it seemed that Ryoichi was fine. And, more importantly, his misconception that Anton was a woman was cleared up as well. Anton couldn't help but give a small chuckle. "If you think she's rough, be careful around Celia." The rear admiral glanced back, making sure she hadn't heard that. Good. He was safe.

When the question about who they were came up, Anton looked back at the fallen form of Nise no Akuma. "Not really. Though if that tattoo was any indication, they're with the revolutionary army." Heremembeted encountering the revolutionaries once upon a time, during one of his early missions. But he never encountered anyone like that.

Anton sighed, looking at Ryoichi. "Sorry about this. First day in the crew and already dragged into my mess."
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Name : Ryoichi Ayugai
Epithet : The Bear
Age : 22
Height : 6 feet 1 inch (1.85m)
Weight : 198 lbs (95kg)
Species : Human
Faction : Marines
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Marine Rank : Petty Officer
Crew Role : Gunner
Devil Fruit : Kuma-Kuma no Mi (Bear-Bear Fruit) Model: Polar Bear
Haki Level : 1
Hitpoints (HP) : 163
Attack (ATK) : 135
Defense (DEF) : 120
Reflex (RX) : 140
Willpower (WP) : 125
Level : 14
Experience Points : 1478
Income Multiplier : +13%
Berries Berries : 1,300,000
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Thu Nov 12, 2020 6:40 am
Ryoichi would flinch a bit as the medic would do one last strong pull to tie the bandages down. "I shall keep that in mind." Ryoichi responded to Anton's remark about Celia, grinning softly then. The medic collected herself up and left the spot to go and see if any other need to have their wounds tended.

Ryoichi's face expression turned a bit more serious again. It was clear they had entered back into the "duty" territory of speaking about the Akuma and Kuma they had just faced. He slowly nodded his head as he heard the tattoo being mentioned, stroking his chin, "I myself did not see any tattoo, then again, I was too focused on fighting. But I'll take your word for it. Lets see what interrogation will bring out of them." he slowly nodded as he said that, sighing softly. He moved his shoulder, stretching himself a bit as he stood back up.

As he had stood up, he blinked as Anton apologized to him. He was surprised to see a higher up even apologize for something like that. He chuckeld softly and responded to his apology "No need to apologise. Fighting is in my blood so it was nothing too new for me. What was new though was the opponent.". After having said that, he couldn't help but grin softly and extend his right hand out infront of Anton, clearly it was for a hand shake. "Hope our work together will last for a while and we will be able to do a lot good for this world. he said out. For Ryoichi, it was another new adventure into unknowingness, but it was one he was looking forward to.
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Name : Anton La'croix
Epithet : Screaming Grasshopper
Age : 23
Height : 5'9''
Weight : 186lb
Species : Human
Faction : Marine
World Position : Rear Admiral
Crew : The Guardian Knights
Ship : The Grand Steamer
Crew Role : Captain
Devil Fruit : Bug-Bug Fruit, Model: Grasshopper
Haki Level : 5
Hitpoints (HP) : 270
Attack (ATK) : 360
Defense (DEF) : 340
Reflex (RX) : 380
Willpower (WP) : 340
Level : 58
Experience Points : 5807
Income Multiplier : +43%
Berries Berries : 187,640,000
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Thu Nov 12, 2020 9:44 pm
Ryoichi seemed ok with everything. Well, he was a marine after all. They all were expecting to get into a fight. This just happened sooner than expected. Anton gave his new crewmate a smile. "Well, I certainly hope you enjoy working with us. Welcome to the Guardian Knights."

Meanwhile, in the Grand Line.

"It would seem Nise no Akuma has fallen..."

Mephisto growled. That damn fool! He had warned them about charging off after that marine. But did he listen? No. And now, he had been beaten and was captured.

In the darkness, a woman laughed. "What did you expect? That fool was a joke from the very beginning."

"Now holdon," came another voice in the dark, "Nise might not have been a true demon, but he's no slouch. Anton's certainly come along way."

"You sound almost proud of that."

The figure in th ed darkness shrugged. "Can you blame me?"

"Regardless, Nise no Akuma was one of us." Mephisto cut in, his expression sour, "And now his capture provides a link to us directly!" Mephisto sat back and sighed. "For now, we must leave him be, give all this time to cool off. No more going after him whole he's in the Blues. Understand?"

Everyone nodded. Mephisto sighed in frustration. He had hoped to pick the marine off while he was green. But all this, now they would be forced to wait. Well, as long as he remained in the Blues, he wasn't a threat.

And if he came into the Grand Line, then they'll hit him with everything they've got.

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Epithet : The Conqueror (Formerly "Black Fist")
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" / 310 cm
Weight : 1043 lbs / 473 kg
Species : Human Cyborg
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Haki Level : 9
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Hitpoints (HP) : 750
Attack (ATK) : 800
Defense (DEF) : 600
Reflex (RX) : 715
Willpower (WP) : 650
Level : 100
Prestige : 8
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Fri Dec 18, 2020 4:51 pm

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Anton La'croix
+ Your intro post fell a bit flat in terms of setting up the scene and the occasion. As the first poster in a group thread, it becomes your responsibility to establish hooks for your RP partners if you're in the same faction/group.
+ Also, when connecting your current thread to events that may have happened off-screen or in a previous thread, be sure to provide some hints to what happened. This is not to say you should do lengthy exposition. But, you should sprinkle in at least a little bit more context. Short posts are only good when they are appropriately sweet.
+ I like how Anton had practiced saying Suika's name. You're very good at reflecting Anton's unique personality through your writing. But, I think you can take it one step further. It would have been even funnier to actually see Anton practicing Suika's name.
+ [Julius gave a boy.] LOL, hilarious typo.
+ Good work explaining other crewmates' absence in keeping with their roles and personalities!
+ I don't know if Anton is just bad at using marine's ranks to address them, or if you're failing to remember they're marines. "Mr. Ayugai" should not be how you refer to Ryoichi. Also, I noticed a distinct lack of salutes, but, I will assume this is because everyone is casual with Anton.
+ Please use lighter colours for dialogue in your threads in the future. I believe the skin for RevDawn had changed prior to you starting this thread, so, you have no excuse. Your colour choices make it extremely difficult for me to read a lot of your dialogue.
+ I liked your visual description of Nise no Akuma. While I wouldn't call it striking, it felt short but appropriately sweet.
+ You should not be rolling dice for buffing Stat Morphs. They are a guaranteed hit.
+ Please try to use the established abbreviations - i.e. "RX", not "Ref".
+ [a man in a metal bear suit] Not sure if this was Anton's misunderstanding or yours. Nise no Kuma was not wearing a metal bear suit.
+ Your first combat post had a lot of typos. Do your best to avoid these by doing a follow-up readthrough.
+ The marines waiting around to cheer Anton is fine for the first few moments of the fight. You should give them something to do later. Marines are not innocent civilians. They should generally not be sidelined to this degree.
+ [Why were his cybernetics acting up? ] This seemed to be from Akuma's perspective. You should be careful when switching perspectives from your character to another. The transition should be apparent, otherwise, it can interrupt the flow of the narration.
+ I like that Anton is becoming more and more confident over the various boss fights he has had. But, your boss fights still leave a lot to be desired in terms of plot development.
+ I liked how you roleplayed out the Shed Skin technique's husk as the reason for Akuma's missed UT. That is an excellent use of the combat system!
+ Our site's Revolutionary Army is actually called the New Revolutionary Army (NRA).
+ While the boss himself was just another generic baddie who came out of absolutely nowhere, I do like that you're setting up for a future plot with Demon's Revolt and that final cutaway to the Grand Line. [And if he came into the Grand Line, then they'll hit him with everything they've got.] This line was a bit forced though.
+ Also, your boss' Max HP should have been 394, not 310. Tier 4+ characters have their HP calculated differently. I have reduced your Difficulty Score to +1 mainly because WP was this boss' highest stat but the lower HP effectively made him have 120 less WP.


Ryoichi Ayugai
+ If I'm not mistaken, this is Ryoichi's debut thread. For debut posts, you should strive to make an impact with your characters. Their personality should shine in said post. When I finish reading a debut post, I expect to have an idea of what that character is like. You can, of course, later transform my understanding of him with character development. But, what you should definitely avoid is a bland intro where I can't tell your character apart from any number of other nameless characters around him.
+ I mentioned the lack of salutes in Anton's post. Suika failed to salute him also. Only you remembered to salute. Kudos!
+ Sometimes, you can omit certain details as they don't add much to a scene. [Ryoichi had managed to fulfill his 'mission'. He had found the barrel to refill jug he was holding in his right hand.] In this case, mentioning which hand he used to hold the jug was unnecessary.
+ [He would then proceed to start moving towards the group.] Try to avoid redundant words and phrases. "Proceed to start moving" is overkill. You could just say "He then proceeded towards the group" or "He then started to move towards the group".
+ [He was wearing the normal Marine issued clothes: Sleeveless white shirt with blue stripes on the colar part of the shirt, blue sailors scarf, dark blue pants and black tank boots.] When you're about to interact with another player character, you should also try to highlight what stands out about yours. This allows your RP partner to make use of such details.
+ [ "Congratulations on your promotion." he would rise his jug a tiny bit in a 'congratulating' manner.] Another example of a redundant phrase. You raising the jug after congratulating him in dialogue already implies you are raising it in a congratulatory manner. If Ryoichi were the silent type, the other option here would've been to skip the dialogue and say "He would raise his jug in a congratulatory manner". On that note, you should also research the difference between the word "raise" and "rise" and when you should use one or the other.
+ [...the little bit of bits...] [He looked over the pulled over table, looking at...] Be aware of your word choice. Repetitive use of certain words, especially so close together, can be jarring.
+ I believe Anton may have been a poor senpai here. Stat Morphs only need a roll if you're trying to debuff someone with them. Otherwise, they are always guaranteed. Your "graze" with the Weaving technique should have been a solid success.
+ I appreciated you showing calculations in your combat trackers.
+ It's "fur", not "furr".
+ [It did not seem like it but these words somewhat ticked Ryoichi off. Years of training, only to have his attacks be called weak, even after they obviously have taken its toll on his opponent.] This is a decent example of what I count as character development during combat - finding out what makes Ryoichi tick.
+ ["What ever you are trying to do, it wont help you out! You can't defeat my metal form!"] Definitely something a kids' villain would say.
+ Why did it not surprise Ryoichi to see Anton defeat the demon? You should have either expanded on this or instead have had Ryoichi be surprised by the stark contrast in Anton's behaviour during the battle and his behaviour before it.




REWARDS

Anton La'Croix
Difficulty Bonus: +25% (+1)
Quality Bonus: +100% (A)
Income Multiplier: +30% (Berry Printer + Rear Admiral)

EXP: 113 [50 + 25%(50) + 100%(50)]
Berries: 34,425,000 [250k*54 + 25%(250k*54) + 100%(250k*54) + 30%(250k*54)]



Old EXP: 5369
Updated EXP: 5369 (EXP redirected to Ryoichi Ayugai)

Old balance: 258,455,000
Updated balance: 292,880,000



Ryoichi Ayugai
Difficulty Bonus: +25% (+1)
Quality Bonus: +25% (C)
Income Multiplier: +20% (Anton's Berry Printer)

EXP: 75 [50 + 25%(50) + 25%(50)]
Berries: 4,250,000 [250k*10 + 25%(250k*10) + 25%(250k*10) + 20%(250k*10)]



Old EXP: 1000
Updated EXP: 1188 (113 EXP redirected from Anton La'Croix)

Old balance: 50,000
Updated balance: 4,300,000

Since Ryoichi soloed a +1 boss and defeated him, he has completed the [[hardboiled]] Hardboiled perk challenge.




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