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This post has assessment comments.Wed Jul 08, 2020 8:14 pm

Rosa Sparks


Rosa Sparks Elely

Basic Character Information


Starting Bonus: Hard Boiled | [Starting Bonus Roll]

First Name: Rosa
Middle Name/Initial:
Last Name: Sparks
Epithet:
Age: 20
Gender: Female
Race: Cyborg
Faction: Pirate
Profession: Engineer, Smith/Carpenter, Scientist, Doctor


Physical Appearance


Height: 5'8"
Weight: 285 lbs

Hair Style: Side-swept ponytail with an undercut.
Hair Color: Orange
Eye Color: Amber
Scars: Rosa's visible scars are the fact that she is missing her right eye and has a thin diagonal cut running from her forehead to her chin on the right side of her face respectively. She additionally has a metal, cybernetic prosthetic for her right hand. There are more but she does not often display them to others.
Clothing and Accessories: Rosa traditionally wears a variety of armored blouses with odd star/sword shapes on them. She combines this with a leather belt matched to her thigh-high combat boots and her short shorts. Additionally, she will wear a leather glove on her left hand. This is matched to her eye-patch and boots. Her right hand is a cybernetic, brass plated prosthetic which she usually leaves bare. On days that she is feeling particularly fancy, she will pull out a cloak that clasps onto her shoulders with a signature broach of three bones.

Description: Rosa is a Long-legged Human/Cyborg mix. Her arms and legs are muscular but lithe, and her movements possess an eerie grace to them. In truth, that is an illusion. Rosa's body possesses a tapestry of scars that tell the tale of a difficult life and of cybernetic enhancements undergone as a result. Rosa has styled her hair to one side, with only a few rebellious bangs curling and framing her face. One can almost always find a smile lurking at the corners of her mouth, as if there is some joke being told that only she can hear.



The Past


Main Traits: Intense curiosity and a sense of empathy. Dreams of exploring new concepts, even if her old ones blow up in her face.
Likes: Inventing, modifications, pets (robotic), pensive moments with her thoughts, being praised, people with vision.
Dislikes: When things don't work, gears grinding, hairy animals, being ignored
Unique laugh: Gaw-eee-eee-eee-hah

Hometown: Ilusia
Personality: The best way to describe Rosa's personality is giddy. Whether it's demonstrating a new  invention, or exploring a new island, Rosa believes that there is always something exciting waiting just around the corner. Rosa does her best to make this excitement infections (sometimes literally. Don't ask about the laughing gas experiment.) and will pally up with those who she perceives as needing a little kick in the arse to really start enjoying themselves. There are exceptions of course, with regards to violent injuries, her hometown, or the corrupt dealings of the marines. In those times, a much more somber Rosa is shown.

History:
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Name : The Administrator
Epithet : The Admin
Age : 9999
Species : Artificial Intelligence
Faction : Administration
Crew : Administrators
Ship : The Administering
Crew Role : Administrator
Devil Fruit : Admin-Admin Fruit
Haki Level : 99
Hitpoints (HP) : 9999
Attack (ATK) : 9999
Defense (DEF) : 9999
Reflex (RX) : 9999
Willpower (WP) : 9999
Level : 9999
Prestige : 9999
Experience Points : 999999
Bounty :
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Berries :
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Rosa Sparks Empty Re: Rosa Sparks

This post has assessment comments.Fri Jul 10, 2020 8:20 am
Overall, this was an excellently written bio. However, there were a few things in your history that do not fit the context of RevDawn's OP universe.

Firstly, it's the Thalassa family. I don't think this was spelt correctly even once. XD

Secondly, while it's not entirely unheard of in the OP universe for a 14-year-old to have influence over royalty, the Thalassa family of Ilusia is supposed to be conservative. For them to roll over and take advice from a kid that's not even part of the family is not very convincing.

Thirdly, Ilusia is meant to be more of a classic medieval fantasy island. For robots to be thrown into the mix would take away from that vision. This would be okay if Ilusia hadn't already been referenced in a World Event.

Lastly, but most importantly, nano-bots. No nano-bots, please. Technological marvels are not entirely out of place in the OP universe, but, said technology has always had a steampunk-esque theme. Nano-bots are just too sci-fi. I'm not saying it can never be a thing. But, if you want to bring something so unheard of into the universe, you'll have to earn your way to it through long-term setup and RP.

Rosa Sparks wrote:

Rosa Sparks


Rosa Sparks Elely

Basic Character Information


Starting Bonus: Hard Boiled | [Starting Bonus Roll]

First Name: Rosa
Middle Name/Initial:
Last Name: Sparks
Epithet:
Age: 20
Gender: Female
Race: Cyborg
Faction: Pirate
Profession: Engineer, Smith/Carpenter, Scientist, Doctor


Physical Appearance


Height: 5'8"
Weight: 285 lbs

Hair Style: Side-swept ponytail with an undercut.
Hair Color: Orange
Eye Color: Amber
Scars: Rosa's visible scars are the fact that she is missing her right eye and has a thin diagonal cut running from her forehead to her chin on the right side of her face respectively. She additionally has a metal, cybernetic prosthetic for her right hand. There are more but she does not often display them to others.
Clothing and Accessories: Rosa traditionally wears a variety of armored blouses with odd star/sword shapes on them. She combines this with a leather belt matched to her thigh-high combat boots and her short shorts. Additionally, she will wear a leather glove on her left hand. This is matched to her eye-patch and boots. Her right hand is a cybernetic, brass plated prosthetic which she usually leaves bare. On days that she is feeling particularly fancy, she will pull out a cloak that clasps onto her shoulders with a signature broach of three bones.

Description: Rosa is a Long-legged Human/Cyborg mix. Her arms and legs are muscular but lithe, and her movements possess an eerie grace to them. In truth, that is an illusion. Rosa's body possesses a tapestry of scars that tell the tale of a difficult life and of cybernetic enhancements undergone as a result. Rosa has styled her hair to one side, with only a few rebellious bangs curling and framing her face. One can almost always find a smile lurking at the corners of her mouth, as if there is some joke being told that only she can hear.



The Past


Main Traits: Intense curiosity and a sense of empathy. Dreams of exploring new concepts, even if her old ones blow up in her face.
Likes: Inventing, modifications, pets (robotic), pensive moments with her thoughts, being praised, people with vision.
Dislikes: When things don't work, gears grinding, hairy animals, being ignored
Unique laugh: Gaw-eee-eee-eee-hah

Hometown: Ilusia
Personality: The best way to describe Rosa's personality is giddy. Whether it's demonstrating a new  invention, or exploring a new island, Rosa believes that there is always something exciting waiting just around the corner. Rosa does her best to make this excitement infections (sometimes literally. Don't ask about the laughing gas experiment.) and will pally up with those who she perceives as needing a little kick in the arse to really start enjoying themselves. There are exceptions of course, with regards to violent injuries, her hometown, or the corrupt dealings of the marines. In those times, a much more somber Rosa is shown.

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