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This post has assessment comments.Sun Sep 20, 2020 9:51 pm

Sho


Sho CjDIgX4

Basic Character Information


Starting Bonus: Hardboiled

First Name: Sho
Middle Name/Initial: N/A
Last Name: N/A
Epithet: Fallen Angel Sho
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Race: Sky Islander
Faction: Pirate
Profession: Entertainer / Inventor


Physical Appearance


Height: 5'9"
Weight: 150 lbs.

Hair Style: Shoulder Length and Wavy
Hair Color: Straw Blonde that turns Platinum Blonde under the right lighting.
Eye Color: Golden Yellow
Scars: N/A
Clothing and Accessories: Given Sho's aspirations, at least publically, it isn't false to assume that he treats fashion as not just a way to express himself, but as a weapon to achieve his goals.  For a wannabe idol clothes will have the fans talking just as much as the musical act.  So, he does his best to stay fashion conscious in all his wardrobe decisions.  If putting on a show the Skypean will dress in something ostentatious, wearing an outfit never seen before and never to repeat again.  A spandex suit made from mermaid scales, an authentic replica Marine admiral uniform turned runway chic, or an outfit comprised of sown on Baby Den Den Mushi to help project his voice.  When it comes to a show an outfit must never be done twice and the more famous he becomes the more incredible his clothing will be each new show.

Outside of a concert Sho dresses much more comfortably and is far less eye catching.  A black shirt serves as his top, the V of the shirt cut low to show off pale white skin.  Black pants flow from his waistline and tuck themselves into large white boots that come up to nearly knee height.  The pants are secured by a large copper colored sash which wraps around his body.  Over all of this is a large white coat.  The coat drapes down, falling just short of the ground.  It's main purpose is to hide his wings, a useful disguise for his heritage only removed when he isn't trying to be subtle anymore.  For accessories Sho prefers to wear black bracers, a feather pin made from his own wings, and a collar around his neck.  The pin is so that he doesn't forget his heritage, even as he may work to hide it from others.  While the collar is to remind himself that if he does not succeed the fate of a slave might be in store for him.  

Description: Sho is of average height, appearing to be closer on the lithe side of physically built.  To an outsider, he appears to be a pushover.  Someone who couldn't physically threaten a fly, let alone a person.  His face is fare, bordering on feminine almost devoid of any harsh features.  This isn't helped by his shoulder length blonde hair. Even his skin is soft to the touch, the only places where calluses form being the balls of his feet and his fingertips. On more than occasion his graceful build and girly features has had him mistaken as a woman.  The fact that he carries himself at all times with a level of poise and grace only further muddies the waters as people try to determine his gender.

Under the slim build though is the body of a performer or gymnast.  It is all corded muscle designed for lightning fast reflexes or whip cord reaction.  The fact that his cover is that of an idol or entertainer helps establish why he is built this way.  To an outsider he has trained to be like this for his profession.  It isn't easy to jump to any other conclusions when every way he carries himself is to sell the lie.  Outside of the public eye his expression is typically dour and serious.  He either appears constantly indifferent to his surroundings or perpetually disappointed by them.  When mingling with the masses though he is all smiles and false cheer.  He exudes an insincere charisma.  The final thing about him, hidden most of the time on his back, are a pair of small wings.  The wings are white and are the proof that he is a Skypiean.


The Past


Main Traits: Merciless, Cunning, Proud, Meticulous, Two-Faced, Curious, Paranoid, Ambitious, and Pessimistic.
Likes: Music, Tinkering, Dancing, Sky Islands, Smoking, Beautiful Destruction, Hot Cocoa, Espionage, and Birds.
Dislikes: His Fans, Abuse of Technology, The World Government, People Who Talk Too Much, Corruption, Slavery, Bugs, Traitors, Aurelian Sterling, and "Sheeple".
Unique laugh: When playing false a light a giggle: "Tehehehe"
When laughing as his true self it is a conniving snicker which shifts to boisterous mad chorus: "Yehehehe....YAHAHAHAHAHA!"

Hometown: Paradise, Sky Islands
Personality: The public, and those who do not truly know Sho, know him as an Angel.  He is just generally a wholesome and good individual.  Never without a smile, always quick to compliment others, the first to help a little old lady cross the street.  Sho is the perfect role model.  He is the ideal idol.  He is hardworking and passionate about music and his fans.  Always determined to put on the best show possible.  He doesn't mire himself in politics or religion, rather attempting to stay pure to the music.  Never one for crude language or dirty jokes.  Mothers want him to be their son and daughters wish to take him home and take care of him for the rest of his life.  Even guys have a hard time hating him since his complete lack of interest in women makes him a complete non-threat to them.  He is a total innocent, naive to the world.  The worst thing someone could say would be that he is a pushover and one might fear that he would be easily taken advantage of.  Of course, that's only what he wants people to see about him.

The truth is that Sho is really a devil in white winged disguise.  Everything he does is to enact his politic agenda.  He yearns for the destruction of the World Government and the surety that the Sky Islands will remain free of the influence of those who monopolize the Vearth.  He will commit every crime to accomplish this and could care less about others.  The fact that he puts on a facade isn't some game to him or any actual desire to have people like him.  It is a necessary tool.  He recognizes that the best way to accomplish his goal is to use people.  To gather the masses and turn them on their precious World Government.  Given the rarity of his kind below the clouds he is always watchful that he might be sold out to some Celestial Dragon looking for a Skypiean pet.  This paranoia often causes him to doubt even the most loyal of ally.  Although he enjoys manipulating the fools who see only his false persona the reality is that their presence is only tolerated so long as they are of use to him.  The second that ceases to be the case is the second they are hung out to dry.

Besides his reason for living he only holds two true passions, music and machinery.  The first he would keep to himself if he had a choice, but to accomplish his goals he shares with the world.  The second he would share with the world, but for a need of secrecy he keeps largely to himself.  Sho loves music, but it is a private pleasure.  One he would only share with trusted individuals during quiet affairs.  However, the practical need to use the masses have pushed him to sharing it with the world as the false idol persona he flaunts before others.  Meanwhile he has always enjoyed tinkering with the Dials of his homeland.  However, their unique nature means that showing these off could reveal too much and because of it he has been relegated to only using it when in combat or planning to deal with all witnesses any way.  Ultimately, Sho is an enigma and a contradiction.  It is difficult to tell where the mask and true face start or end.  Perhaps one will never truly know Sho, perhaps he doesn't even truly know himself.  

History:


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Gray
The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray Starks
Epithet : The Conqueror / Black Fist
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species : Human Cyborg
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Haki Level : 10
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Hitpoints (HP) : 750
Attack (ATK) : 800
Defense (DEF) : 600
Reflex (RX) : 715
Willpower (WP) : 650
Level : 100
Prestige : 8
Experience Points : 18000
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Berries : [ber] 25,000,000,000
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This post has assessment comments.Mon Sep 21, 2020 8:04 am
Let me start by saying that this was very well written bio, and was it not for a few lore conflicts, it would have my instant seal of approval. There are two conflicts here that stood out to me. One is that the Sky Islands, including Skypeia, are ruled by an alliance of Sky Lords. There is no title of God anymore. Next is that World Government is very well aware of the existence of the Sky Islands. In fact, its existence is relatively well known across the Grand Line. This is mainly thanks to Aurelian Sterling, a Shichibukai who is from the Sky Islands. That being said, the Sky Islands are left alone by the World Government partly because it is difficult to get there, and partly because they don't want to antagonize their strongest Shichibukai.

One more small thing I had to note (this is not something that needs to be corrected or anything, it's really more just a comment). Sho's personality comes off as extremely psychopathic after he murdered the marine. If this was intentional and you purposefully didn't want the reader to sympathize with him, then please ignore this paragraph. If not, then you should consider adding a more direct tragedy in Sho's life that drove him to his hate. As things are now, his cause is shakier than Hordy Jones'.

Sho wrote:

Sho


Sho CjDIgX4

Basic Character Information


Starting Bonus: Hardboiled

First Name: Sho
Middle Name/Initial: N/A
Last Name: N/A
Epithet: Fallen Angel Sho
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Race: Sky Islander
Faction: Pirate
Profession: Entertainer / Inventor


Physical Appearance


Height: 5'9"
Weight: 150 lbs.

Hair Style: Shoulder Length and Wavy
Hair Color: Straw Blonde that turns Platinum Blonde under the right lighting.
Eye Color: Golden Yellow
Scars: N/A
Clothing and Accessories: Given Sho's aspirations, at least publically, it isn't false to assume that he treats fashion as not just a way to express himself, but as a weapon to achieve his goals.  For a wannabe idol clothes will have the fans talking just as much as the musical act.  So, he does his best to stay fashion conscious in all his wardrobe decisions.  If putting on a show the Skypean will dress in something ostentatious, wearing an outfit never seen before and never to repeat again.  A spandex suit made from mermaid scales, an authentic replica Marine admiral uniform turned runway chic, or an outfit comprised of sown on Baby Den Den Mushi to help project his voice.  When it comes to a show an outfit must never be done twice and the more famous he becomes the more incredible his clothing will be each new show.

Outside of a concert Sho dresses much more comfortably and is far less eye catching.  A black shirt serves as his top, the V of the shirt cut low to show off pale white skin.  Black pants flow from his waistline and tuck themselves into large white boots that come up to nearly knee height.  The pants are secured by a large copper colored sash which wraps around his body.  Over all of this is a large white coat.  The coat drapes down, falling just short of the ground.  It's main purpose is to hide his wings, a useful disguise for his heritage only removed when he isn't trying to be subtle anymore.  For accessories Sho prefers to wear black bracers, a feather pin made from his own wings, and a collar around his neck.  The pin is so that he doesn't forget his heritage, even as he may work to hide it from others.  While the collar is to remind himself that if he does not succeed the fate of a slave might be in store for him.  

Description: Sho is of average height, appearing to be closer on the lithe side of physically built.  To an outsider, he appears to be a pushover.  Someone who couldn't physically threaten a fly, let alone a person.  His face is fare, bordering on feminine almost devoid of any harsh features.  This isn't helped by his shoulder length blonde hair. Even his skin is soft to the touch, the only places where calluses form being the balls of his feet and his fingertips. On more than occasion his graceful build and girly features has had him mistaken as a woman.  The fact that he carries himself at all times with a level of poise and grace only further muddies the waters as people try to determine his gender.

Under the slim build though is the body of a performer or gymnast.  It is all corded muscle designed for lightning fast reflexes or whip cord reaction.  The fact that his cover is that of an idol or entertainer helps establish why he is built this way.  To an outsider he has trained to be like this for his profession.  It isn't easy to jump to any other conclusions when every way he carries himself is to sell the lie.  Outside of the public eye his expression is typically dour and serious.  He either appears constantly indifferent to his surroundings or perpetually disappointed by them.  When mingling with the masses though he is all smiles and false cheer.  He exudes an insincere charisma.  The final thing about him, hidden most of the time on his back, are a pair of small wings.  The wings are white and are the proof that he is a Skypiean.


The Past


Main Traits: Merciless, Cunning, Proud, Meticulous, Two-Faced, Curious, Paranoid, Ambitious, and Pessimistic.
Likes: Music, Tinkering, Dancing, Sky Islands, Smoking, Beautiful Destruction, Hot Cocoa, Espionage, and Birds.
Dislikes: His Fans, Abuse of Technology, The World Government, People Who Talk Too Much, Corruption, Slavery, Bugs, Traitors, and "Sheeple".
Unique laugh: When playing false a light a giggle: "Tehehehe"
When laughing as his true self it is a conniving snicker which shifts to boisterous a mad chorus: "Yehehehe....YAHAHAHAHAHA!"

Hometown: Paradise, Sky Islands
Personality: The public, and those who do not truly know Sho, know him as an Angel.  He is just generally a wholesome and good individual.  Never without a smile, always quick to compliment others, the first to help a little old lady cross the street.  Sho is the perfect role model.  He is the ideal idol.  He is hardworking and passionate about music and his fans.  Always determined to put on the best show possible.  He doesn't mire himself in politics or religion, rather attempting to stay pure to the music.  Never one for crude language or dirty jokes.  Mothers want him to be their son and daughters wish to take him home and take care of him for the rest of his life.  Even guys have a hard time hating him since his complete lack of interest in women makes him a complete non-threat to them.  He is a total innocent, naive to the world.  The worst thing someone could say would be that he is a pushover and one might fear that he would be easily taken advantage of.  Of course, that's only what he wants people to see about him.

The truth is that Sho is really a devil in white winged disguise.  Everything he does is to enact his politic agenda.  He yearns for the destruction of the World Government and the surety that the Sky Islands will remain free of the influence of those who monopolize the Vearth.  He will commit every crime to accomplish this and could care less about others.  The fact that he puts on a facade isn't some game to him or any actual desire to have people like him.  It is a necessary tool.  He recognizes that the best way to accomplish his goal is to use people.  To gather the masses and turn them on their precious World Government.  Given the rarity of his kind below the clouds he is always watchful that he might be sold out to some Celestial Dragon looking for a Skypiean pet.  This paranoia often causes him to doubt even the most loyal of ally.  Although he enjoys manipulating the fools who see only his false persona the reality is that their presence is only tolerated so long as they are of use to him.  The second that ceases to be the case is the second they are hung out to dry.

Besides his reason for living he only holds two true passions, music and machinery.  The first he would keep to himself if he had a choice, but to accomplish his goals he shares with the world.  The second he would share with the world, but for a need of secrecy he keeps largely to himself.  Sho loves music, but it is a private pleasure.  One he would only share with trusted individuals during quiet affairs.  However, the practical need to use the masses have pushed him to sharing it with the world as the false idol persona he flaunts before others.  Meanwhile he has always enjoyed tinkering with the Dials of his homeland.  However, their unique nature means that showing these off could reveal too much and because of it he has been relegated to only using it when in combat or planning to deal with all witnesses any way.  Ultimately, Sho is an enigma and a contradiction.  It is difficult to tell where the mask and true face start or end.  Perhaps one will never truly know Sho, perhaps he doesn't even truly know himself.  

History:
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This post has assessment comments.Mon Sep 21, 2020 1:44 pm
Thank you for the review, I have made some revisions around your notes. In particular I tried to align things with the lore. Still going for Psychopath so that won't likely come off any different, but hopefully I fledged out the death of the marine a little bit more so it feels less like some mental breakdown and more like a methodical sociopath.
Gray
The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray Starks
Epithet : The Conqueror / Black Fist
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species : Human Cyborg
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Haki Level : 10
[[haoasc]][[busoasc]][[kenbunasc]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 750
Attack (ATK) : 800
Defense (DEF) : 600
Reflex (RX) : 715
Willpower (WP) : 650
Level : 100
Prestige : 8
Experience Points : 18000
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Berries : [ber] 25,000,000,000
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This post has assessment comments.Mon Sep 21, 2020 2:06 pm
I like how you made the tone dials significant for Sho in more ways than one. Using them to spy on the spy was an excellent idea.

Approved!

Sho wrote:

Sho


Sho CjDIgX4

Basic Character Information


Starting Bonus: Hardboiled

First Name: Sho
Middle Name/Initial: N/A
Last Name: N/A
Epithet: Fallen Angel Sho
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Race: Sky Islander
Faction: Pirate
Profession: Entertainer / Inventor


Physical Appearance


Height: 5'9"
Weight: 150 lbs.

Hair Style: Shoulder Length and Wavy
Hair Color: Straw Blonde that turns Platinum Blonde under the right lighting.
Eye Color: Golden Yellow
Scars: N/A
Clothing and Accessories: Given Sho's aspirations, at least publically, it isn't false to assume that he treats fashion as not just a way to express himself, but as a weapon to achieve his goals.  For a wannabe idol clothes will have the fans talking just as much as the musical act.  So, he does his best to stay fashion conscious in all his wardrobe decisions.  If putting on a show the Skypean will dress in something ostentatious, wearing an outfit never seen before and never to repeat again.  A spandex suit made from mermaid scales, an authentic replica Marine admiral uniform turned runway chic, or an outfit comprised of sown on Baby Den Den Mushi to help project his voice.  When it comes to a show an outfit must never be done twice and the more famous he becomes the more incredible his clothing will be each new show.

Outside of a concert Sho dresses much more comfortably and is far less eye catching.  A black shirt serves as his top, the V of the shirt cut low to show off pale white skin.  Black pants flow from his waistline and tuck themselves into large white boots that come up to nearly knee height.  The pants are secured by a large copper colored sash which wraps around his body.  Over all of this is a large white coat.  The coat drapes down, falling just short of the ground.  It's main purpose is to hide his wings, a useful disguise for his heritage only removed when he isn't trying to be subtle anymore.  For accessories Sho prefers to wear black bracers, a feather pin made from his own wings, and a collar around his neck.  The pin is so that he doesn't forget his heritage, even as he may work to hide it from others.  While the collar is to remind himself that if he does not succeed the fate of a slave might be in store for him.  

Description: Sho is of average height, appearing to be closer on the lithe side of physically built.  To an outsider, he appears to be a pushover.  Someone who couldn't physically threaten a fly, let alone a person.  His face is fare, bordering on feminine almost devoid of any harsh features.  This isn't helped by his shoulder length blonde hair. Even his skin is soft to the touch, the only places where calluses form being the balls of his feet and his fingertips. On more than occasion his graceful build and girly features has had him mistaken as a woman.  The fact that he carries himself at all times with a level of poise and grace only further muddies the waters as people try to determine his gender.

Under the slim build though is the body of a performer or gymnast.  It is all corded muscle designed for lightning fast reflexes or whip cord reaction.  The fact that his cover is that of an idol or entertainer helps establish why he is built this way.  To an outsider he has trained to be like this for his profession.  It isn't easy to jump to any other conclusions when every way he carries himself is to sell the lie.  Outside of the public eye his expression is typically dour and serious.  He either appears constantly indifferent to his surroundings or perpetually disappointed by them.  When mingling with the masses though he is all smiles and false cheer.  He exudes an insincere charisma.  The final thing about him, hidden most of the time on his back, are a pair of small wings.  The wings are white and are the proof that he is a Skypiean.


The Past


Main Traits: Merciless, Cunning, Proud, Meticulous, Two-Faced, Curious, Paranoid, Ambitious, and Pessimistic.
Likes: Music, Tinkering, Dancing, Sky Islands, Smoking, Beautiful Destruction, Hot Cocoa, Espionage, and Birds.
Dislikes: His Fans, Abuse of Technology, The World Government, People Who Talk Too Much, Corruption, Slavery, Bugs, Traitors, Aurelian Sterling, and "Sheeple".
Unique laugh: When playing false a light a giggle: "Tehehehe"
When laughing as his true self it is a conniving snicker which shifts to boisterous mad chorus: "Yehehehe....YAHAHAHAHAHA!"

Hometown: Paradise, Sky Islands
Personality: The public, and those who do not truly know Sho, know him as an Angel.  He is just generally a wholesome and good individual.  Never without a smile, always quick to compliment others, the first to help a little old lady cross the street.  Sho is the perfect role model.  He is the ideal idol.  He is hardworking and passionate about music and his fans.  Always determined to put on the best show possible.  He doesn't mire himself in politics or religion, rather attempting to stay pure to the music.  Never one for crude language or dirty jokes.  Mothers want him to be their son and daughters wish to take him home and take care of him for the rest of his life.  Even guys have a hard time hating him since his complete lack of interest in women makes him a complete non-threat to them.  He is a total innocent, naive to the world.  The worst thing someone could say would be that he is a pushover and one might fear that he would be easily taken advantage of.  Of course, that's only what he wants people to see about him.

The truth is that Sho is really a devil in white winged disguise.  Everything he does is to enact his politic agenda.  He yearns for the destruction of the World Government and the surety that the Sky Islands will remain free of the influence of those who monopolize the Vearth.  He will commit every crime to accomplish this and could care less about others.  The fact that he puts on a facade isn't some game to him or any actual desire to have people like him.  It is a necessary tool.  He recognizes that the best way to accomplish his goal is to use people.  To gather the masses and turn them on their precious World Government.  Given the rarity of his kind below the clouds he is always watchful that he might be sold out to some Celestial Dragon looking for a Skypiean pet.  This paranoia often causes him to doubt even the most loyal of ally.  Although he enjoys manipulating the fools who see only his false persona the reality is that their presence is only tolerated so long as they are of use to him.  The second that ceases to be the case is the second they are hung out to dry.

Besides his reason for living he only holds two true passions, music and machinery.  The first he would keep to himself if he had a choice, but to accomplish his goals he shares with the world.  The second he would share with the world, but for a need of secrecy he keeps largely to himself.  Sho loves music, but it is a private pleasure.  One he would only share with trusted individuals during quiet affairs.  However, the practical need to use the masses have pushed him to sharing it with the world as the false idol persona he flaunts before others.  Meanwhile he has always enjoyed tinkering with the Dials of his homeland.  However, their unique nature means that showing these off could reveal too much and because of it he has been relegated to only using it when in combat or planning to deal with all witnesses any way.  Ultimately, Sho is an enigma and a contradiction.  It is difficult to tell where the mask and true face start or end.  Perhaps one will never truly know Sho, perhaps he doesn't even truly know himself.  

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