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This post has in-line assessment comments.Wed Dec 28, 2022 6:50 am

Bennu "Firebug" Cerularius


To Be Drawn...

Basic Character Information


First Name: Bennu
Middle Name/Initial: --
Last Name: Cerularius
Epithet: To Be Achieved!
Birthdate:  November 20th, 1804
Gender: Male
Species/Race/Tribe: Human Fishman Hybrid
Faction: Pirate
Profession: Navigator, Lookout, Musician


Physical Appearance


Height: 5'8"
Weight: 162 lbs

Hair Style: Dutch braided Mohawk
Hair Color: Strawberry Blonde
Eye Color: Dark stormy blue
Scars:
Clothing and Accessories: Is usually seen wearing an oversized floral printed shirt with loose black shorts. Though the shirts he has tends to be all different colors mostly in warm or ocean colors that are usually soft or smooth to the touch. Has a severe soft spot for floral print shirts along with very baggy or loose fitting clothes. Hates the feeling of form fitting clothes it feels restricting to him. Has two pairs of shoes he likes to swap between, one is a pair of black sandals the other is a pair of bamboo slippers. Uses his papa's old scarf as a belt since his pants don't quite fit him, and also wears three very personal accessories.

His most cherished accessory is a black pearl bracelet he always wears on his right wrist while the next most cherished is a silver necklace with a peacock green pearl and silver anchor as pendants. He wears a very simple black choker to hide a scar on his neck.

Description: Looking like a typical human with an athletic build standing at a decent height of 5' 8". Most would think of him as a normal human but looking closer you could see some difference, small but there. Bennu's skin is a wooded-brown color but with a slight greenish blue tone with faint striping on his back. He bears scars that are a brighter color that's more teal tinted. The scars he wears are quite numerous, the most recognizable scar he has is a massive burn scar on his right shoulder stretched from the base of his neck to the top of his right shoulder. His other scars are scattered about barely noticeable though two are quite interesting. One is a large bite scar on his left side with a small thin lined scar on his neck. Bennu's hands are slim and slightly small but coarse with noticeable webbing between his fingers, same with his feet. He's very expressive with his facial expressions and hand gestures while using faint noises as a sort of highlighted reaction to most things.

Bennu's got a squarish soft face with a defined jaw. Large expressive eyes that were ink colored until light shone on them, black eyes became colored like an incoming storm on the sea's horizon with slightly thick eyebrows. A small nose with full soft reddish lips that hide normal looking teeth just a bit more jagged and sharp. His hair is a naturally strawberry blonde hair with golden shine that's quite thick and springy with loose curls, though it was styled in a very simple long mohawk but kept it in a dutch braid.


The Past


Main Traits: Fun-Loving|Imaginative|Frank|Sarcastic|Unforgiving|Opprotunistic
Likes: Sailing, Exploring, Adventures, Food, Anything Shiny, Papa, Reading, Fire
Dislikes: Backstabbers, Liars, Being Stuck in One Place, Loneliness, Cold
Unique laugh: "Tori he he he"

Hometown: New World Sea

Personality: Bennu is usually a very imaginative and fun-loving guy, always joking about and finding the fun in any situation he finds himself in. He acts as a sort of buffer in desperate or hopeless situations when around other people. He adores going on adventures and exploring new areas hating the boringness that being stuck in one place gives him. Bennu is easy to get along with and tries his best to not judge based solely on first impressions, preferring to give people the benefit of the doubt. Despite his generally optimistic view on lots of things he can be quite frank in very serious situations, he doesn't like buttering up words just because it's uncomfortable for the person to hear it. Tends to react quite sarcastically to dumb questions, obvious observations or just people that annoy him. Bennu tends to take any opportunities that arise regardless of how this makes him seen to everyone outside of his circle. He feels if it gets him closer to his goal then there is no reason not to take the opportunity. After two major events in his life Bennu has become unforgiving to anyone that has wronged him or anyone he's gotten close to. There isn't anything the person could do to gain forgiveness from Bennu since he won't give them the chance to hurt him or the people close to him again.

When in a fight Bennu uses his imaginative habits to its fullest, making him quite unpredictable in a fight always having a trick up his sleeve. Despite his seemingly endless energy and his attention needing to constantly be captured Bennu is surprisingly quite temperate during a fight. Showing some serious self-restraint when dealing with enemies especially ones that use the over-used tactic of taunting their opponents. Though this doesn't mean Bennu isn't affected by it, it merely means that he doesn't let it show on his face or in his actions. Bennu despite having this immense self-control does have his limits and when reached he breaks out of his restraints like oil being fed to fire. He can be quite playful in fights he doesn't take seriously or when he's more focused on running than fighting. Bennu uses his sarcasm to irritate his opponents so they slip up more and become less accurate. Still being as opportunistic as usual Bennu can be sneaky with attacks especially hand to hand. He tries to hit close to vital points that are exposed or even make openings himself. Depending on the opponent he's going up against, Bennu might try to finish the fight as soon as possible or drag it out for as long as the opponent can last.
History:
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The Conqueror / Black Fist
[tracker=/t131-tracker-gray-starks#504]
Name : Gray
Epithet : "The Conqueror"; "Black Fist"
Age : 49
Height : 10'2" (310 cm)
Weight : 1043 lbs (473 kg)
Species/Tribe : Cyborg Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Bounty : [ber=r] 5,000,000,000
EXP Bonus : +0.20 (to all allies)
Income Bonus : +0.20
Shop Discount : -30%
Balance : [bel] 25,000,000,000
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[Bio] Bennu Cerularius Empty Re: [Bio] Bennu Cerularius

This post has in-line assessment comments.Fri Dec 30, 2022 10:58 am
[approve]I generally provide comments regarding writing in quest assessments, but since this is already your second character and I have yet to give you feedback on your first quest, I thought it prudent to warn you about two common pitfalls that contribute negatively to players' quality scores in my assessments.

[warn=""]
- Your history had several incredibly lengthy paragraphs. Paragraphs almost never need to (or should) be that long. If you have more than a hundred words in a single paragraph, it can probably be broken down.

- There was a sudden change in tense part way through your history. The first chunk of your history was written in past tense, but the rest of it was written in present tense. This shift can be incredibly jarring and impede the flow of your narration, so try to be consistent! Past tense is generally preferred for narration in fiction.
[/warn]
[/approve]

Bennu wrote:

Bennu "Firebug" Cerularius


To Be Drawn...

Basic Character Information


First Name: Bennu
Middle Name/Initial: --
Last Name: Cerularius
Epithet: To Be Achieved!
Birthdate:  November 20th, 1804
Gender: Male
Species/Race/Tribe: Human Fishman Hybrid
Faction: Pirate
Profession: Navigator, Lookout, Musician


Physical Appearance


Height: 5'8"
Weight: 162 lbs

Hair Style: Dutch braided Mohawk
Hair Color: Strawberry Blonde
Eye Color: Dark stormy blue
Scars:
Clothing and Accessories: Is usually seen wearing an oversized floral printed shirt with loose black shorts. Though the shirts he has tends to be all different colors mostly in warm or ocean colors that are usually soft or smooth to the touch. Has a severe soft spot for floral print shirts along with very baggy or loose fitting clothes. Hates the feeling of form fitting clothes it feels restricting to him. Has two pairs of shoes he likes to swap between, one is a pair of black sandals the other is a pair of bamboo slippers. Uses his papa's old scarf as a belt since his pants don't quite fit him, and also wears three very personal accessories.

His most cherished accessory is a black pearl bracelet he always wears on his right wrist while the next most cherished is a silver necklace with a peacock green pearl and silver anchor as pendants. He wears a very simple black choker to hide a scar on his neck.

Description: Looking like a typical human with an athletic build standing at a decent height of 5' 8". Most would think of him as a normal human but looking closer you could see some difference, small but there. Bennu's skin is a wooded-brown color but with a slight greenish blue tone with faint striping on his back. He bears scars that are a brighter color that's more teal tinted. The scars he wears are quite numerous, the most recognizable scar he has is a massive burn scar on his right shoulder stretched from the base of his neck to the top of his right shoulder. His other scars are scattered about barely noticeable though two are quite interesting. One is a large bite scar on his left side with a small thin lined scar on his neck. Bennu's hands are slim and slightly small but coarse with noticeable webbing between his fingers, same with his feet. He's very expressive with his facial expressions and hand gestures while using faint noises as a sort of highlighted reaction to most things.

Bennu's got a squarish soft face with a defined jaw. Large expressive eyes that were ink colored until light shone on them, black eyes became colored like an incoming storm on the sea's horizon with slightly thick eyebrows. A small nose with full soft reddish lips that hide normal looking teeth just a bit more jagged and sharp. His hair is a naturally strawberry blonde hair with golden shine that's quite thick and springy with loose curls, though it was styled in a very simple long mohawk but kept it in a dutch braid.


The Past


Main Traits: Fun-Loving|Imaginative|Frank|Sarcastic|Unforgiving|Opprotunistic
Likes: Sailing, Exploring, Adventures, Food, Anything Shiny, Papa, Reading, Fire
Dislikes: Backstabbers, Liars, Being Stuck in One Place, Loneliness, Cold
Unique laugh: "Tori he he he"

Hometown: New World Sea

Personality: Bennu is usually a very imaginative and fun-loving guy, always joking about and finding the fun in any situation he finds himself in. He acts as a sort of buffer in desperate or hopeless situations when around other people. He adores going on adventures and exploring new areas hating the boringness that being stuck in one place gives him. Bennu is easy to get along with and tries his best to not judge based solely on first impressions, preferring to give people the benefit of the doubt. Despite his generally optimistic view on lots of things he can be quite frank in very serious situations, he doesn't like buttering up words just because it's uncomfortable for the person to hear it. Tends to react quite sarcastically to dumb questions, obvious observations or just people that annoy him. Bennu tends to take any opportunities that arise regardless of how this makes him seen to everyone outside of his circle. He feels if it gets him closer to his goal then there is no reason not to take the opportunity. After two major events in his life Bennu has become unforgiving to anyone that has wronged him or anyone he's gotten close to. There isn't anything the person could do to gain forgiveness from Bennu since he won't give them the chance to hurt him or the people close to him again.

When in a fight Bennu uses his imaginative habits to its fullest, making him quite unpredictable in a fight always having a trick up his sleeve. Despite his seemingly endless energy and his attention needing to constantly be captured Bennu is surprisingly quite temperate during a fight. Showing some serious self-restraint when dealing with enemies especially ones that use the over-used tactic of taunting their opponents. Though this doesn't mean Bennu isn't affected by it, it merely means that he doesn't let it show on his face or in his actions. Bennu despite having this immense self-control does have his limits and when reached he breaks out of his restraints like oil being fed to fire. He can be quite playful in fights he doesn't take seriously or when he's more focused on running than fighting. Bennu uses his sarcasm to irritate his opponents so they slip up more and become less accurate. Still being as opportunistic as usual Bennu can be sneaky with attacks especially hand to hand. He tries to hit close to vital points that are exposed or even make openings himself. Depending on the opponent he's going up against, Bennu might try to finish the fight as soon as possible or drag it out for as long as the opponent can last.
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