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Castor O. Nox
[Episode] Thrill of the Kill - Page 2 G7UGK6I
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Name : Castor O. Nox
Epithet : Sanpaku | The Azure Pheasant | Duke Of Lvneel
Age : 25
Height : 5'9"
Weight : 175lbs
Species : Three-Eye Tribesman
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
Ship : The Wailing Calamity
Crew Role : Captain | Navigator | Book Collector
Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
[[haospec]][[busospec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 525
Attack (ATK) : 495
Defense (DEF) : 450
Reflex (RX) : 560
Willpower (WP) : 500
Level : 80
Experience Points : 8000
Bounty : 480,000,000
EXP Multiplier : +10%
Income Multiplier : +10%
Shop Discount : 20%
Berries Berries : 184,584,688
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Mon Jan 25, 2021 10:26 am
Round 1:
Castor O. Nox uses [MT] Curse of Orochi on Gilligan
Castor O. Nox uses [LT] Tunc Gelida  on Gilligan
Castor O. Nox uses [LT] Flicker  on Gilligan
Castor O. Nox uses UT on Gilligan

Gilligan uses MT on Castor O. Nox
Gilligan uses LT on Castor O. Nox
Gilligan uses LT on Castor O. Nox
Gilligan uses UT on Castor O. Nox




COMBAT TRACKERS:
PLAYER STATS:

(List the current values for your stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

HP: 423/450 (Damage: 27)
ATK: 450
DEF: 450
RX: 656 (525) - Reflex Buff
WP: 500

PLAYER RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list your current RX% and DMG% against them.)

vs. {Gilligan}
RX%: 195%
DMG%: 2.2



USED 3 TECHNIQUES | 0 TOGGLES | 0 HAKI:

(List all techniques (including UTs), toggles, and types of haki used/activated this turn and their effects.)

TECHNIQUES
{Curse of Orochi} | {MT} | {hit} | {stat morph} | {effects: -50% Defense} | {Gilligan}
{Tunc Gelida} | {LT} | {hit} | {stat morph} | {effects: -25% Reflex} | {Gilligan}
{Flicker} | {LT} | {hit} | {stat morph} | {effects: +25% Reflex} | {self}
{UT} | {UT} | {hit} | {flat} | {damage: 11} | {Gilligan}



TOGGLES
{toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
{haki type} | {haki effect}

3 TECHNIQUES ACTIVE | 0 TOGGLES | 0 HAKI ACTIVE:

(List all techniques that have currently active effects and indicate the remaining duration. Also, indicate what effects they are dealing: e.g. DoT value, Stat Morph value.)

TECHNIQUES
{Curse of Orochi} | {effects: -50% Defense} | {2}
{Tunc Gelida} | {effects: -25% Reflex} | {1}
{Flicker} | {effects: +25% Reflex} | {1}


TOGGLES
{active toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
{active haki type} | {haki effect} | {haki duration left}

3 TECHNIQUES COOLING DOWN | 0 HAKI COOLING DOWN:

(List all techniques and haki that are currently on cooldown and note the number of rounds before you can use them again.)

TECHNIQUES
{Curse of Orochi} | {8}
{Tunc Gelida} | {5}
{Flicker} | {5}


HAKI
{haki type} | {cooldown left}

OPPONENT STATS:

(For each one of your opponents, list the current values for the stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

{Opponent name}
Level: 77
HP: 369/380 (Damage: 11)
ATK: 500
DEF: 200 (400)
RX: 336 (420) - Reflex Debuff
WP: 400



OPPONENT RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list their current RX% and DMG% against you and your Crew Companions.)

{Gilligan} vs. {Castor O. Nox}
RX%: 51
DMG%: 1.1



OPPONENT TECHNIQUES USED:

(List the class, damage, and target of techniques used by each one of your opponents if you or your Crew Companions are the direct targets.)

{Gilligan}
{MT} | {miss} |  {damage: N/A} | {Castor O. Nox}
{LT} | {hit} |  {damage: 11} | {Castor O. Nox}
{LT} | {hit/miss} |  {damage: 11} | {Castor O. Nox}
{UT} | {hit/miss} |  {damage: 5} | {Castor O. Nox}





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Mon Jan 25, 2021 10:26 am
The member 'Castor O. Nox' has done the following action : Dice Roll


#1 'Reflex Check' : 13, 10, 1

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#2 'Reflex Check' : 4, 19, 19, 20
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[Episode] Thrill of the Kill - Page 2 G7UGK6I
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Name : Castor O. Nox
Epithet : Sanpaku | The Azure Pheasant | Duke Of Lvneel
Age : 25
Height : 5'9"
Weight : 175lbs
Species : Three-Eye Tribesman
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
Ship : The Wailing Calamity
Crew Role : Captain | Navigator | Book Collector
Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
[[haospec]][[busospec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 525
Attack (ATK) : 495
Defense (DEF) : 450
Reflex (RX) : 560
Willpower (WP) : 500
Level : 80
Experience Points : 8000
Bounty : 480,000,000
EXP Multiplier : +10%
Income Multiplier : +10%
Shop Discount : 20%
Berries Berries : 184,584,688
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Mon Jan 25, 2021 10:59 am
Round 2:
Castor O. Nox uses [HT] Awakened Status on Gilligan
Castor O. Nox uses [LT] Summanus Luna  on Gilligan
Castor O. Nox uses UT on Gilligan

Gilligan uses MT on Castor O. Nox
Gilligan uses LT on Castor O. Nox
Gilligan uses LT on Castor O. Nox
Gilligan uses UT on Castor O. Nox




COMBAT TRACKERS:
PLAYER STATS:

(List the current values for your stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

HP: 407/450 (Damage: 16)
ATK: 983 (450) - Buff 100% ATK
DEF: 450
RX: 656 (525) - Reflex Buff
WP: 500

PLAYER RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list your current RX% and DMG% against them.)

vs. {Gilligan}
RX%: 195%
DMG%: 4.9



USED 3 TECHNIQUES | 0 TOGGLES | 0 HAKI:

(List all techniques (including UTs), toggles, and types of haki used/activated this turn and their effects.)

TECHNIQUES
{Awakened Status} | {HT} | {hit} | {stat morph} | {effects: +75% Attack} | {self}
{Summanus Luna} | {LT} | {hit} | {stat morph} | {effects: +25% Attack} | {self}
{UT} | {UT} | {hit} | {flat} | {damage: 24} | {Gilligan}



TOGGLES
{toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
{haki type} | {haki effect}

5 TECHNIQUES ACTIVE | 0 TOGGLES | 0 HAKI ACTIVE:

(List all techniques that have currently active effects and indicate the remaining duration. Also, indicate what effects they are dealing: e.g. DoT value, Stat Morph value.)

TECHNIQUES
{Awakened Status} | {effects: +75% Attack} | {3}
{Curse of Orochi} | {effects: -50% Defense} | {1}
{Summanus Luna} | {effects: +25% Attack} | {1}
{Tunc Gelida} | {effects: -25% Reflex} | {0}
{Flicker} | {effects: +25% Reflex} | {0}


TOGGLES
{active toggle name} | {toggle effect}


HAKI
{active haki type} | {haki effect} | {haki duration left}

5 TECHNIQUES COOLING DOWN | 0 HAKI COOLING DOWN:

(List all techniques and haki that are currently on cooldown and note the number of rounds before you can use them again.)

TECHNIQUES
{Awakened Status} | {11}
{Summanus Luna} | {5}
{Curse of Orochi} | {7}
{Tunc Gelida} | {4}
{Flicker} | {4}


HAKI
{haki type} | {cooldown left}

OPPONENT STATS:

(For each one of your opponents, list the current values for the stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

{Opponent name}
Level: 77
HP: 351/380 (Damage: 24)
ATK: 500
DEF: 200 (400) - Defense Debuff
RX: 336 (420) - Reflex Debuff
WP: 400



OPPONENT RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list their current RX% and DMG% against you and your Crew Companions.)

{Gilligan} vs. {Castor O. Nox}
RX%: 51
DMG%: 1.1



OPPONENT TECHNIQUES USED:

(List the class, damage, and target of techniques used by each one of your opponents if you or your Crew Companions are the direct targets.)

{Gilligan}
{MT} | {miss} |  {damage: N/A} | {Castor O. Nox}
{LT} | {hit} |  {damage: 11} | {Castor O. Nox}
{LT} | {miss} |  {damage: N/A} | {Castor O. Nox}
{UT} | {hit} |  {damage: 5} | {Castor O. Nox}





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Mon Jan 25, 2021 10:59 am
The member 'Castor O. Nox' has done the following action : Dice Roll


#1 'Reflex Check' : 10

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#2 'Reflex Check' : 5, 15, 3, 17
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[Episode] Thrill of the Kill - Page 2 G7UGK6I
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Name : Castor O. Nox
Epithet : Sanpaku | The Azure Pheasant | Duke Of Lvneel
Age : 25
Height : 5'9"
Weight : 175lbs
Species : Three-Eye Tribesman
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
Ship : The Wailing Calamity
Crew Role : Captain | Navigator | Book Collector
Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
[[haospec]][[busospec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 525
Attack (ATK) : 495
Defense (DEF) : 450
Reflex (RX) : 560
Willpower (WP) : 500
Level : 80
Experience Points : 8000
Bounty : 480,000,000
EXP Multiplier : +10%
Income Multiplier : +10%
Shop Discount : 20%
Berries Berries : 184,584,688
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Mon Jan 25, 2021 11:23 am
Round 3:
Castor O. Nox uses [HT] Vritra on Gilligan
Castor O. Nox uses [LT] Trenta  on Gilligan
Castor O. Nox uses UT on Gilligan

Gilligan uses HT on Castor O. Nox
Gilligan uses UT on Castor O. Nox




COMBAT TRACKERS:
PLAYER STATS:

(List the current values for your stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

HP: 407/450 (Damage: )
ATK: 1,154 - Buff 75% ATK + Buso Haki + Mode Buff
DEF: 360 (450) - Mode Debuff
RX: 625 (Ken Bonus)
WP: 500

PLAYER RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list your current RX% and DMG% against them.)

vs. {Gilligan}
RX%: 165%
DMG%: 5.77



USED 3 TECHNIQUES | 1 TOGGLES | 3 HAKI:

(List all techniques (including UTs), toggles, and types of haki used/activated this turn and their effects.)

TECHNIQUES
{Vritra} | {HT} | {hit} | {flat} | {damage: 285} | {Gilligan}
{Trenta} | {LT} | {hit} | {flat} | {damage: 57} | {Gilligan}
{UT} | {UT} | {hit} | {flat} | {damage: 28} | {Gilligan}



TOGGLES
{Thor's Vengeance} | {+ 20% Attack , - 20% Defense}


HAKI
{BUSO} | {35% of Willpower to ATK}
{KEN} | {25% of Willpower to RX}
{HAO} | {-10% RX to Gilligan}


5 TECHNIQUES ACTIVE | 1 TOGGLES | 3 HAKI ACTIVE:

(List all techniques that have currently active effects and indicate the remaining duration. Also, indicate what effects they are dealing: e.g. DoT value, Stat Morph value.)

TECHNIQUES
{Awakened Status} | {effects: +75% Attack} | {2}
{Curse of Orochi} | {effects: -50% Defense} | {0}
{Summanus Luna} | {effects: +25% Attack} | {0}


TOGGLES
{Thor's Vengeance} | {+ 20% Attack , - 20% Defense}


HAKI
{BUSO} | {35% of Willpower to ATK} | {4}
{KEN} | {25% of Willpower to RX} | {4}
{HAO} | {-10% RX to Gilligan} | {4}

7 TECHNIQUES COOLING DOWN | 3 HAKI COOLING DOWN:

(List all techniques and haki that are currently on cooldown and note the number of rounds before you can use them again.)

TECHNIQUES
{Vritra} | {5}
{Trenta} | {1}
{Awakened Status} | {10}
{Summanus Luna} | {4}
{Curse of Orochi} | {6}
{Tunc Gelida} | {3}
{Flicker} | {3}


HAKI
{BUSO} | {9}
{KEN} | {9}
{HAO} | {9}

OPPONENT STATS:

(For each one of your opponents, list the current values for the stats below, accounting for stat morphs and damage.)

{Opponent name}
Level: 77
HP: 0/380 (Damage: 370) (Knocked Out)
ATK: 500
DEF: 200 (400) - Defense Debuff
RX: 378 (420)
WP: 400



OPPONENT RATIOS:

(For each one of your opponents, list their current RX% and DMG% against you and your Crew Companions.)

{Gilligan} vs. {Castor O. Nox}
RX%: 51
DMG%: 1.1



OPPONENT TECHNIQUES USED:

(List the class, damage, and target of techniques used by each one of your opponents if you or your Crew Companions are the direct targets.)

{Gilligan}
N/A





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Mon Jan 25, 2021 11:23 am
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#1 'Reflex Check' : 10, 1, 4

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#2 'Reflex Check' : 4, 1
Castor O. Nox
[Episode] Thrill of the Kill - Page 2 G7UGK6I
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Name : Castor O. Nox
Epithet : Sanpaku | The Azure Pheasant | Duke Of Lvneel
Age : 25
Height : 5'9"
Weight : 175lbs
Species : Three-Eye Tribesman
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
Ship : The Wailing Calamity
Crew Role : Captain | Navigator | Book Collector
Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
[[haospec]][[busospec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 525
Attack (ATK) : 495
Defense (DEF) : 450
Reflex (RX) : 560
Willpower (WP) : 500
Level : 80
Experience Points : 8000
Bounty : 480,000,000
EXP Multiplier : +10%
Income Multiplier : +10%
Shop Discount : 20%
Berries Berries : 184,584,688
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Mon Jan 25, 2021 3:59 pm







blur_on




Zeus v.s. Poseidon



On command, Castor lowered the height of his familiar’s flight rapidly, swooping down to Gilligan’s position aboard the Sea King’s head almost instantaneously. Though the Fishman could’ve kept up with the man’s movements partially, his reflexes didn’t chime in quick enough to avoid the incoming attack.

Removing Summer Rain from its sheath swiftly, Castor impaled the cracked katana into the man’s chest cage. Acting a conductor for the lightning menace’s discharge, he’d release a surge of electrical charges that would be enough to cause Gilligan’s body to convulse violently. The man’s would begin to dilate, shaking violently from the impalement. Covering his hand in Busoshoku Haki, the Fishman would latch onto the blade, ripping it from his chest cage like a toothpick from a refreshment platter.

Almost instantly, with zero effort, the Fishman would wind up his arm, hand still firmly gripped onto the pirate’s blade, flinging the Imp and his plaything into the container of weights atop the Sea King’s back. Castor’s body would make a nasty buckling nose, the impact of which left tiny fractures in his shoulder and lower back.

“Fishmen are ten times stronger than you human.”

“Luckily for me... I’m not a human. Wrong race.”

The two traded insults turning their attention back to the conflict at hand. Whistling, the Sea King infants started to plummet below the depths once more. Alarmed, refusing to become submerged below sea level, Castor shot up in quick fashion towards the skies, only to be met with a pillar of water containing two larger sized weights which intercepted the trajectory of his flight.

“It’s hard to avoid objects coming at you that quickly with your Logia, ain’t it brat?” Gilligan shouted cockily. “In Paradise, as rare as your abilities are… It won’t make you untouchable.” Gilligan concluded, hopping off the Sea King to submerge himself below the water currents.

Spiraling in mid-air from the impact, Castor gained control of himself, ceasing the knock back caused from the momentum of the propelled weights. Managing to deflect one of the weights with Summer Rain, only increased the size of the crack in the weapon.

Closing his eyes, Castor attempted to pin down the man’s position using his radar but movements below the water were incredibly hard to trace with the conflicting sound of the currents and aquatic life below. Attempting to zero in on his position with Kenbunshoku Haki was temporarily useful but the speeds to which Gilligan was swimming at and Castor’s incompetence with the haki sub-ability created difficulty in pinning down Gilligan’s position.

From below the water, two thin twisters emerged shooting upwards at the Imp’s position in the sky, cycling around him, the eyes of which aimed to slam the Imp in his side. Phasing through the twisters with his intangibility, Castor was able to read the attacks' incoming purpose and route, avoiding the concentrated blasts of water and air pressure.

“You brought this upon yourself… Jiro ro-ro… The world has enough predators. Some sparks have to be outed young.” Gilligan declared arrogantly, sticking out his head from beneath the surface.

Hovering in mid-air, Castor processed his next move, floating in silence recapping the man’s style of attack. After a few moments, four spheres of lightning began to orbit around the Goro Goro users, as if his body acted as their center of gravity. “Gashi Gashi… Let’s change up my style of approach.”


Word Count: 567(2,854|5000)


| Tagged: @Brood


Notes:





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Name : Brood X. Bach
Epithet : Mushiba (Tooth-Decay)
Age : 28
Height : 6'3"
Weight : 190 lbs
Species : Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Alliance : Nox Prime
Crew : P.T.S.D.
Ship : The Dead Air
Crew Role : Chairman
Devil Fruit : Amai Amai no Mi
Haki Level : 7
[[kenbunspec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 380
Attack (ATK) : 525
Defense (DEF) : 350
Reflex (RX) : 510
Willpower (WP) : 400
Level : 70
Experience Points : 7039
Bounty : 355,000,000
Income Multiplier : +10%
Shop Discount : -20%
Berries Berries : 146,550,000
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Sat Jan 30, 2021 1:42 pm







OOC: (-eh is a cough; -ee is a weeze)

Brood's attention was divided in way too many directions and he was starting to notice pretty quickly that not every grunt here was pathetic in terms of their potential abilities. If they had trained for a few months straight instead of immediately sailing out here, perhaps their stories would have ended differently. It was too bad then that they jumped the gun when it came to dealing with a monster like Brood.

"...!!!" Letting his guard down was a mistake, of course. He didn't see the giant rhinoceros closing the distance between the pair. Brood's spine cracked as he found himself pressed up against the railing, blood seeping from the corner of his mouth as his foe leapt backwards.

Ironic...

It turned out that the Rhinoceros Mink was a rather rare opponent, for as he had charged Brood he seemed to change his form into that of an Ancient Zoan, the Raino Raino no Mi: Model: Wholly Rhino. Meaning that his already normal Rhinoceros form had grown bigger as he activated his hybrid form.

Now covered in a shaggy demeanor with a far larger musculature, Salazar found himself gloating towards the man he had believed he broke. "Such arrogance. You underestimate me because you think we operate from the Blues? But that is not he case. We only ever hunt big fish who refuse to leave the well." He looked upon Brood with a devilish grin on his face. He figured he had the advantage in this fight.

In a flash he covered the distance once again, bringing his mighty halberd down upon the area in which Brood was retching. Brood found himself being smashed through the side of the railing, in a downward angle towards the ocean below. Though he managed to generate enough sand so that he fell onto a mound of it, just inches before becoming submerged.

Groggily returning to his feet, he looked over towards his mighty zoan-using opponent, spiting out blood while cracking his knuckles. This was going to be a far more annoying affair than he had first surmised. Though Brood still had no desire to go all out. It was the first time he got to fight someone stronger than him in a long while. Why not savor it? He recalled the last time he was on the backfoot like this. It wasn't as bad as when he fought his master, but this also wasn't as bad as when he fought that stupid raping dinosaur-tard.

Squatting low, he'd launch himself high into the air, looking down towards the remaining bounty hunters with his typically expressionless face. His eyes were trained upon the biggest threat in the area and his hands where tucked into his pockets, in a manner that was clearly done to make Brood feel cooler than he actually was. Without a moment's hesitation the sound of a projectile could be heard closing the distance between a far off location and the ship that he was soon to barrel down upon.

The moment that they saw it, it was far too late.

The Dead Air had launched a single cannonball towards Brood, which he caught the moment he started to descend. Allowing the man to ride it's momentum towards the ship now that he found himself riding upon the solid black object. As the weapon flew over the ship itself, Brood used a blast from the past. Doing the same technique that he had done back when he attacked Las Camp. "Sweet-eh Sunshine..."

Pressing down on the cannonball with all of his might, he was able to redirect the velocity and the trajectory of the soaring metal object, so that it was sent straight downwards, ripping into the deck of the ship and piercing through its hull. This immediately caused many aboard the vessel to enter into a scramble. Spreading out the forces that were aboard the enemy ship. As a good portion rushed below in order to repair the newly sprung 'leak', Brood found himself descending slowly onto the battlefield. Forming a large ball of sugar underneath his feet and launching the spiked sphere downwards towards the hapless victims below.

Salazar figured he could bat the sphere away, but it broke moments before it was within range of his halberd. Even despite the fact that the large rhinoceros decided to jump upward to match the incoming attack. As the sphere split, it rained down hell in the form of sugar rain. Solidified bullets that pierced through both the crew and the ship with reckless abandoned. Missing his axe strangely enough. A few of the bullets ripped through the tough hide of the rhino mink zoan hybrid.

Salazar hollered out in pain, though strengthened his grip and swing at full force towards Brood, clashing with the latter's sugar coated leg. Backflipping off the halberd, Brood landed on his feet, extending both of his arms outwards towards Salazar as the larger individual landed. To Brood's surprise though, it seemed as though the man had grown...

Within an instance Brood was sent flying backwards through the captain's quarters. As he crashed through the door, a pillar and large oak desk, he raised his head and peered up towards the man responsible. Well... what was left of the man. Before him was a large fully grown Rhino, as Salazar entered his full fifteen feet form. His beady eyes peered upon Brood as he seemed to prepare yet another charging attack. Though seeing the proximity between Brood and the wall leading outside to the ocean below, he hesitated. Such hesitation provided Brood with all the time he needed to send forth several dozen small jagged spears into his opponent.

The force of the attack caught the mink off guard. Launching him backwards briefly and allowing Brood the opportunity to get up and sprint out of the room. Heading towards the man and leaping into the air. Attempting to smash his enclosed fist against the raging beast, only to be met with solid bone the moment he swung through. The clash between the two showcased that Brood lacked a proper way to handle his opponent... traditionally.

"I refuse to lose to pirate scum!" The beast snarled before using his superior physical strength to send Brood backwards. Salazar lowered himself momentarily before pressing off the ground moving forward, rotating like a drill as he approached Brood. "Gore Festival!!"  

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World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
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Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
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Zeus v.s. Poseidon


As the black clouds above Thriller Bark began to shout out in loud claps of thunder, Castor shot several bolts of lightning towards the heavens in response to the environment’s hungry growls. Merging with the random cascading bolts with his own discharge, Castor transformed his entire body into an azure mass of electricity, no longer needing Kwane to soar, but simply hovering in mid-air. From his new state, four electrical orbs hovered around the man’s mass, at the core of the spheres, a lump emerged.

From each lump, a bolt of lightning shot off towards Gilligan, hitting the man on top of his head. The impact forced him beneath the water momentarily but enraged, he’d power through the assault, and emerge once again, landing on the back of one of his Sea Kings. The distance between himself and Castor was indeed several feet, but Gilligan wasn’t ever discouraged, after all, he’d have his Fishman Karate tricks to rely on.

Bending water around the Sea King, the man would summon up a twister, in front of the beast. Once it’d begin to rise up from the sea level, Gilligan would hop inside, allowing himself to be swept away from the water currents momentum. Shooting himself sky bound in a similar fashion that he’d done the weights, Gilligan’s massive body went streamline at Castor’s position in the sky.

Snapping his fingers, several bolts danced from the skies, each one missing Gilligan by an inch, as he’d grove through the skies, manipulating the water droplets on his actual body to change course, he’d make in front of the Imp.

“Fishman Karate - Shark’s Fang!” Gilligan shouted, slamming his palm into Castor’s electrified state, using haki to revert his body back to physical form momentarily. The impact of the palm strike sent the man shooting off at break-neck speeds towards the ocean below. The tailwind from Castor’s moving body caused the man’s facial cheeks to wobble violently, as he’d attempt to regain control of the knock-back. Falling towards the ocean, Gilligan was left plummeting towards the sea, opened and exposed to any incoming attacks, however, his course towards the ocean, and Castor descent were at different paces, the latter being faster.

Sanpaku fought against the momentum, finally regaining control centimeters before he’d hit the ocean’s surface. Exhaling a sigh of relief, Gilligan’s body would touch the aquatic abyss once more, returning beneath an advantageous terrain. Instantly, Castor tried to climb back towards the skies but was met with several weights intercepting his course, these projectiles were starting to become an annoyance.

Flickering through the projectiles, after being nipped by one which almost dislocated his shoulder, Castor flickered between the hoard of Sea King’s who’d surfaced, circling around sea level in a synchronized manner. Activating his Haoshoku Haki, Castor would imprint his will into the Sea King’s minds, causing them to cease swimming, their eyes beginning to fixate on the Imp’s being. “Leave.” Castor offered one command angrily.

The iris of the beasts began to tremble, thrashing around momentarily, the Bull Shark Sea Kings abandoned their containers into the water, breaking the leather straps that’d hoisted them onto their backs. Without delay, swimming away panicky from Thriller Bark. Gilligan emerged from beneath the water, whistling multiple times to cease their retreat but the fear instilled by Castor made them temporarily deaf to his commands.

Hovering, next to the man’s head which peeked from below the sea, Castor kicked the Fishman sky bound in one swift motion using his wooden sandals. Shocked from the Imp’s physical strength, “You possess the King’s Aura as well?! That wasn’t in our informants files! Damn you, Red Devil!” Gilligan shouted. “King’s Aura…. What in the world is that?” Castor thought to himself, ignoring the man’s crazed declaration, and going on the attack, once more.



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Alliance : Nox Prime
Crew : P.T.S.D.
Ship : The Dead Air
Crew Role : Chairman
Devil Fruit : Amai Amai no Mi
Haki Level : 7
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OOC: (-eh is a cough; -ee is a weeze)

The rotating rhino approached with a quickness that Brood wasn't prepared to counter, which led to him being hit straight on by the massive creature and driven downwards through the ship. Crashing through the upper deck and straight through two of the decks that were below. The pair would stop just before crashing through the Hull, though their actions caused the pair to nearly be submerged in water due to killing several of the crew that were working on patching the damage caused just moments before.

The weighty mink was the first to his feet, though noticed that Brood rose effortlessly after a brief pause floating like a bloated corpse in the not-so-shallow water. "How are you still-"

"Boring."

Brood waded through the water for a brief moment, holding the hole in his chest as the sanguine escaped him. "Is this all you can muster with your strongest attack?" Brood could tell it was his enemies finishing maneuver. Yet he stood, standing tall with lifeless eyes that seemed to do naught but bore into the very soul of the mink before him. "You trash.. you haven't seen anything yet."

"Disappointing. You're not worthy to enter the Grandline."

Brood's body seemingly vanished right before Salazar's eyes. Painting the double-horned bounty hunter with a brief moment of panic as reality set in. Brood was faster than anyone he had ever come across in his life. He was on an entirely different level of power.

Appearing back on the top floor. Brood moved towards his axe, reaching out for the haft and ripping it up from the planks, causing splinters to fly everywhere. He'd turn his attention back towards the hole as his opponent raised up from the depths. Brood pointed the axe towards the grey skinned brute. Eyes narrowing all the while. "Don't bother praying. No one will be able to save you."

It was apparent that this came across in a much more frightening manner than many would realize. Since the entire time that Brood was making his way over towards his weapon. Bullets were being fired at him, though they merely bounced off his skin. Skin that was starting to turn the same color as the red liquid that poured out of his chest.

"What the...."

Looking down towards the supposed wound, Brood smirked. "Kashi Ōga." He was informing the man that he needn't worry about the injuries that he had assumed he inflicted to Brood. For this was going to be the end of their little play-date.

Taking both of his hands, he gripped the haft and got into the same stance that a professional baseball player would. Rearing his weapon backwards as though he was building up a great deal of force.

"This... isn't right..." Didn't the News Coo report that both the captain of the Primetime Pirates and the captain of the Nox Pirates got completely destroyed by one of the notoriously stupider Shichibukai? How the hell was it that Brood didn't seem to be struggling at all. Especially since comparatively, the man that was fought in Las Camp didn't have the raw power that Salazar had.

It was then that the horror set in even further for the mink. The ship was capsized and there weren't many others that the crew could escape on. He could feel something emanating off Brood that was unlike anything he had felt before. It wasn't Haki. It was bloodlust.

Bloodlust from an apex predator.

He wanted to give out orders, but he couldn't even speak. He hadn't given up at least. His body just moved on it's own. He rushed forward, still in his full form. Attempting to use his special move once more.

"MIDNIGHT GORE FESTIVAL!!"

The Gore Festival moved faster than it had before. Especially now that he had used full iron-clad armament on his horn. Making it jet black in color.

This was his strongest attack.

It was all or nothing now... But the only thing that would occur from this attack was a lack of consciousness... and a split that went beyond just the mental.

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Age : 25
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Weight : 175lbs
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Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
Ship : The Wailing Calamity
Crew Role : Captain | Navigator | Book Collector
Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
[[haospec]][[busospec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 525
Attack (ATK) : 495
Defense (DEF) : 450
Reflex (RX) : 560
Willpower (WP) : 500
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Finale


As Gilligan’s jacked body flew through the air, the Fishman attempted to control the remaining droplets on his body in attempts to move, but the momentum of his tailspin had broken his concentration. Gliding above the sea surface, tracing the being’s trajectory, Castor appeared to the man’s flank, extending his free hand in a gun-like fashion.

Shooting off a lightning blast from his index’s finger tip, the beam of electricity shot Gilligan several more feet in the air. Ceasing his movement, Castor opened his palms, extending his hands towards the heavens, chasing the man’s kick-back, using the gap between his hands to average.

Transforming both of his hands into a mass of electricity, a pillar of lightning danced from the Imp’s hands, forming into the head of a dragon. Sky blue eyes, sharp jagged teeth that mirrored the movements of lightning bolts dancing in a storm and a long reptilian body, which movements slithered through the skies like a camouflaged snake, seconds away from it’s first meal for the day.

Gilligan panicked, after seeing the mass of lightning rushing towards his position, and unable to do anything but offer defense, Gilligan crossed his arms in front of himself, coating his already scaly skin in a thick armament of Haki.

The dragon’s size encompassed the heavens, each swaying motion through the air accompanied with a clap of thunder, that sunk fear into the hearts of the weak and admiration into the heart’s of the brave at the majesty of nature’s call.

Suddenly, the dramatic advanced cease, a quick surge at the speed of lightning became reality. The dragon’s mouth became the connoisseur to a carnival of flavors, it’s electrical fangs devoured the Fishman’s body, and with each chomp, brought about millions of bolts convulsing through Gilligan’s anatomy.

Drifting in and out of consciousness, Gilligan’s final moments went as follows: Panicked breathing, the image of everything beneath his torso missing from the lighting’s force, only his upper half that had yet to be consumed remained, the smell of charred flesh, only to lose his sense of smell from the intense heat which singed his nose, sealing it shut. Words couldn’t leave his mouth, only groans of pain, agony and regret for the loss.

Finally, the mythical beast finished it’s meal, giving thanks to the heaven’s for it with one final clap of lightning. Floating suspended in the air, sheaving his katana, Summer Rain once more, the final remnants of the light show in the sky called out to the pirates on the island and surrounding ships, as usual, Castor’s pride needed to be stroke, letting everyone around him know of his legend and power.

Hovering around the ship that Brood was fighting the Rhino on, the Imp called out to the Sweet Toothed Pirate, aft. “Finish this fight so we can finalize our alliance, Tooth Decay. Any of their forces that remain can be the banner men for our arrival to Paradise. Lip service is often better than printed press.” Just then, Castor baby den den mushi went off. Strange, not many people called him on this line, and if it did occur, the message would have to be urgent.

Floating away to a safe distance from the two sluggers conflict, Castor awaited the news on the other line. Before Castor could even offer a word of speech, the tune of Victor Abio’s voice rang clean and crisp.

“Nox. Our preparations for our campaign on the capital have been completed. I hope you’ve completed your side mission in the West. I read about your defeat in the papers.”

“Ah… I don’t want to talk about it. It’s a pain in the ass really. The only reason I came to the West is to have that Big Bear owe me a favor. I ended up being covered in dinosaur slobber… I still have scars from the teeth punctures. It wasn’t an easy defeat to accept. Now, I owe those Minks my life. It doesn’t matter. The loss just gives me even more drive to return to Lvneel and finish my business.”

“Tests don’t always end up with positive results. Even in science, though, failures are my favorite part… Watching my subjects scream out in agony’s always a fun time. Don’t forget my Dance Powder! Remember the notes I gave you on it’s content-”

“Yeah yeah… I already got that covered. I bought a ton of it off a slender man in a cheap suit. Well, we stole it together. I gave them Dax’s treasure in exchange. He’ll probably be pissed when he hears about it, Gashi Gashi Gashi…”  Castor announced, breaking out into laughter at the thought of his Vice Captain’s pissed off expression.

“Slender man in a cheap suit… We’ll talk more once you return. The capital is weakening. The brats including the Princess are still missing. We need to march now.”


“Relax. I'll return in about two weeks. Let them sweat… Besides, the Vikings have already made their move. Lvneel done for… Anyway, I’ll talk to you later, Doctor. I’m in the middle of wrapping up our latest alliance.” Castor declared.

“With whom?” Doctor Abio questioned.

“Tooth Decay. The two strongest pirates in the North are about to be formally aligned.” Castor concluded, hanging up the phone before waiting for Victor’s response. Castor’s attention turned back to Brood and his fight, while the remainder of the mercenary forces manned any row boats that remained.

Beginning to flee towards the open seas, the thick miasma around Thriller
Bark blinded the seafarers route, however, any direction away from this chaos would mean seconds, minutes, hours and days added to their life spans.


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Weight : 190 lbs
Species : Human
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Alliance : Nox Prime
Crew : P.T.S.D.
Ship : The Dead Air
Crew Role : Chairman
Devil Fruit : Amai Amai no Mi
Haki Level : 7
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Hitpoints (HP) : 380
Attack (ATK) : 525
Defense (DEF) : 350
Reflex (RX) : 510
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Thu Feb 18, 2021 7:14 am







OOC: (-eh is a cough; -ee is a weeze)

Brood heard this noise... this obnoxiously pretentious noise from some small creature floating above him. Presuming to tell him what to do. Perhaps that was not the intention of whoever the individual happened to be, but it caused for several hundred veins to pop up all around Brood's forehead. He reached out with his hand and grabbed the horn of the incoming Rhino mink. Stopping the man dead in his tracks with such little effort that it shot fear through the creature's eyes. If Brood could stop his strongest attack with little fanfare, why the hell did he allow the fight to drag on like it did.

"W-Wh-"

"Stop for a second." Brood stated coldly as he dropped the Rhino mink and vanished from view. Appearing behind the floating lightning boy after he finished his call and speaking to him a very calm yet clearly agitated voice. "We will be allies, I am not your subordinate. Do not presume to tell me what to do ever again." His drool seeping from the corners of his mouth as sugary wings flapped rhythmically.

"Understand?" Brood wanted to make sure that this little Imp didn't get the wrong idea. Brood was no-one's bitch, not even on accident. He was man responsible for one of the highest body-counts across the North Blue. There was a reason for that.

Brood flickered once more, leaving in a plume of sweetly fruity smelling powered sugar. Appearing back in the spot in which he had just been. Brood had abilities that allowed him to push past the speed that most had, as well as their strength. It was a truly frightening situation to be in when Brood was serious.

Brood was rarely serious, however.

Always trying to punish himself for the sins of his past. It was the main reason he didn't utilize all the tools that he had in a fight, choosing instead to fight like a wild animal at all times. Despite returning to the Deck of the ship, he noted that the Rhinoceros mink had already ordered for his men to pull back and retreat. He could see men getting into life boats and others trying to steer the ship around. Brood shook his head for a moment. What was it that Castor presumed to tell him to do again? Oh right, the Bannermen....

There would be no bannerman.

The glucose that he drew from the myriad of corpses that were stern about this floating battlefield, both by the hand of himself and the hands of castor would begin to rip out of those bodies straight from their source. Staining them red as each of the bodies gave their blood sugar for the cause. Brood's eyes seemed vengeful for a brief moment as he peered towards the location of the escaping mink. Raising his axe above his head he swung it like a golf club with all of his might.

The blood for miles around dove into the water and for a time nothing was seen. But those sea-kings that tried to flee from earlier were nothing more than withered husks as they found themselves skewered and drained of their blood as well. All of the sugar within any creature beneath the waves found itself joining the large sanguine orb that formed beneath the waves. All until the largest vein upon Brood's forehead...popped.

"Bittersweet Ending."

In an instance a million sharpened, blood red barbed spikes ripped up out of the ocean below. Showcasing the overwhelming destructive output that Brood was known for. As they pierced through every living being within the area, each branch rose upwards further and further, bringing their skewered victims to a central point, in which a large sugar cube was formed combining the freshly made corpses into a combined sculpture. From his own opponent to anyone unfortunate enough to be within the range of his sensing... which was just about everyone given his mastery of Kenbunshoku.

He'd peer over towards Castor, narrow his eyes and then with a large bright pink light all of those corpses would be completely and utterly vaporized by the resulting sugar explosion that hit with enough force to send Brood flying backwards towards the island.

It was a good thing he was acrobatic, as he was able to land on his feet, sliding back for quite a while before coming to an abrupt stop. Without any corpses being left behind, it was unlikely that the pair would gain any bounty from their incursion. Without anyone to report what they did, that was just the way that the cookie crumbled. It was a showcase of the consequences that come with bossing around Brood.

Probably won't be trying to tell him to "hurry up and finish" a damn thing in the future. Though, given how stubbornly the imp wanted to recruit the man that wanted to violate him, Brood had his doubts. That kind of craziness was not something that the Tooth-Decay was used to dealing with. But he was more than aware that the alliance was still probably best to establish before they made it to the New World. Before the Yonko's influence began to have increased sway over all new inhabitants within those seas.

"Now-ee we wait." Brood stated as he leaned back against that same tree from earlier. His axe resting next to him as he huffed. He had to calm down before the Imp returned.

A task that was easier said than done.

(OOC: Ultradeath explosion due to 1000+ ATK Stat.)

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Name : Castor O. Nox
Epithet : Sanpaku | The Azure Pheasant | Duke Of Lvneel
Age : 25
Height : 5'9"
Weight : 175lbs
Species : Three-Eye Tribesman
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
Ship : The Wailing Calamity
Crew Role : Captain | Navigator | Book Collector
Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
[[haospec]][[busospec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 525
Attack (ATK) : 495
Defense (DEF) : 450
Reflex (RX) : 560
Willpower (WP) : 500
Level : 80
Experience Points : 8000
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The Alliance


As the horrific scene unfolded below, Castor instinctively retreated backwards. It was a similar reaction to a gazelle catching wind of a lurking predator, a familiar feeling the pirate had experienced many times training in the wild on Swallow Island. If he’d delayed even one second in escaping, his blood would’ve become an offering to the mass execution that occurred below.

The man’s words and actions made an impression on the Imp’s likeness, Castor’s pride usually categorized everyone he’d worked with as fodder, or managers at best. The manipulative side of him didn’t permit Castor to ever say out loud but watching Tooth Decay earned him a level of respect that only a few people in his life had ever gained.

Floating in the skies, watching the last glimpses of the struggling messenger’s arms flailing around in the sea of sucrose, the Pirate Captain would give out a sign, instantaneously jotting towards the island below. Appearing a few meters away from Brood, the Logia’s elemental form reverted to its physical form. Drawing Summer Rain from his waist, the Imp would toss his katana to cross the axe, forming a symbolic ‘X’.

“A warrior who abandons his weapon is either among friends or surrenders his life. I respect you, Brood X. Bach. It seems both of us have destructive tendencies, so the terms of this alliance is clear. Equals. Whatever your move in the world is, I’ll support you. Vice Versa.” Castor declared.

“Though, you’re older than me… Should I be calling you Big Brother now?” Castor declared, chuckling nervously afterwards. Walking over to the wine, Castor would search around for two Sake Cups, filling one for himself, and the next for his newest ally. Finally, grabbing onto a stool, he’d set up the ceremony - the ritual that’d cement their partnership.

“Now. Let’s talk about plans. What is your next step after Thriller Bark, Brood? You mentioned Paradise... I'll need some immediate plans so our paths don't cross unnecessarily.”


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Name : Brood X. Bach
Epithet : Mushiba (Tooth-Decay)
Age : 28
Height : 6'3"
Weight : 190 lbs
Species : Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Alliance : Nox Prime
Crew : P.T.S.D.
Ship : The Dead Air
Crew Role : Chairman
Devil Fruit : Amai Amai no Mi
Haki Level : 7
[[kenbunspec]]
Hitpoints (HP) : 380
Attack (ATK) : 525
Defense (DEF) : 350
Reflex (RX) : 510
Willpower (WP) : 400
Level : 70
Experience Points : 7039
Bounty : 355,000,000
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OOC: (-eh is a cough; -ee is a weeze)

Brood looked over towards one of his crewmates that was polishing a rifle, narrowing his eyes ever so slightly.

Noticing this obvious signal, the crewmate stood up and ran off towards one of the large piles of crates, searching through them at a quick pace, but it was clear that this random subordinate wasn't moving fast out of fear.

Brood moved towards the stool, taking the cup and standing opposite of his newfound... brother. It was a strange idea honestly. Brood never considered himself worthy of such statements. Especially in regards to someone who had a higher bounty than himself. He actually didn't expect for Sanpaku to accept his alliance. Especially since their crews had little in common beyond infamy.

Castor had never invaded a town to thatch everyone there to crosses and Brood had never killed childre-err he never found himself inside of a library.

They were totally different.

"Well-ee, originally I wanted-ee to capture Notice and Spider Miles, though now that I have had a chance to get my brain jostled... perhaps-eh it is best to take Notice for now." He had been ee-wanting to take his eh-ancestral home, but realized-ee that it was more of a financial risk than anything else.

Besides, he wouldn't be spending a great deal of time here in the Blues, so it would be a pain in the ass to protect two islands in the same Blue while establishing himself in the Grandline. Between both the potential financial and time sink, there weren't enough pros to justify an invasion of Spider Miles. But that didn't mean he couldn't go back and visit. It might have been a good idea to give himself a proper send off.

"That will fund my-ee expedition to the eh-Grand Line... and once I set up myself there. I will make my way-ee to San Faldo and take that. It will take me a ee-great deal of time and preparation-eh to take such a place-eh, however." He had heard tale of San Faldo during his time in Water 7.

It was some sort of Carnival City that garnered a great deal of cash flow and had a bevvy of rich clientele that spent time their with their families. Brood wanted nothing more than to have direct access to anyone who could hire him.

Besides, if he greased the palms of enough nobles and financially sound entrepreneurs, the government would have to recognize him as a legitimate player in the world. He'd gain access to things that he would otherwise be unable to gain.

"I was ee=originally going to go there, but I got-eh that missive from the eh-Feral Pirates and I had to take that eh-opportunity to get noticed-ee by one of the big-ee players on the world's stage. But... you saw what eh-happened to the both of us." It was still a sore subject, though he didn't feel as though the losses he took there were the fault of anyone other than himself.

He should have been stronger. Now he was.

"If I can jockey my position within the big names in Paradise, I can become a Shichibukai. Then I'll have legitimacy as privateer. Which means we can't exactly have this alliance be public knowledge. After that... however." He'd look towards Castor with a very stern expression, having starting to drool on either side of his mouth now that he restrained his urges to cease his salivation.

But then the corners of his lips found themselves ascending.

"Well... we will have to wait and see now won't we, Sanpaku-san? Eeheeheeheehe!!" He began to cough erratically, entering a coughing fit that signified that he was laughing his ass off.

There wasn't a need to be so serious all of the time.

"Now what of you?" Brood waited, holding that sake cup in hand still as his subordinate returned with a small black box.

Brood took said box, but drew no attention to it just yet.

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Epithet : Sanpaku | The Azure Pheasant | Duke Of Lvneel
Age : 25
Height : 5'9"
Weight : 175lbs
Species : Three-Eye Tribesman
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Crew : Nox Pirates
Ship : The Wailing Calamity
Crew Role : Captain | Navigator | Book Collector
Devil Fruit : Goro Goro no Mi
Haki Level : 9
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Hitpoints (HP) : 525
Attack (ATK) : 495
Defense (DEF) : 450
Reflex (RX) : 560
Willpower (WP) : 500
Level : 80
Experience Points : 8000
Bounty : 480,000,000
EXP Multiplier : +10%
Income Multiplier : +10%
Shop Discount : 20%
Berries Berries : 184,584,688
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The Alliance


Reconfirming a few places in the North mentioned earlier, Castor made sure to take note of the areas that Brood had his sights on. With everything that Newport had told him about the ‘World Powers’ - becoming an envoy of the marines by taking up a Warlord position wasn’t exactly his style. Becoming an emperor seemed like a long path but it came with long term perks that he couldn’t pass up on.

This was the first sign of Castor’s rookie ignorance. To him, the world was just his play thing, though, he was simply a big fish in a small ocean and the seas ahead were vast, and filled with monsters with much more power and connections than him. Newport had failed to properly instill how truly scary the New World and Paradise was, and it was on purpose.

His mentor needed him to be broken. Without the betrayal and loss that comes with being a pirate to humble Nox, the journey wouldn’t be probable. Listening to the man wheeze and cough his way through his pending itinerary, the Imp had settled on his plans. As the gods had it, their paths probably wouldn’t cross again until Paradise, especially since Brood’s eventual alignment with the marines called for their alliance to be a bit more subtle.

“I’ll conclude my campaign on Lvneel. Then ravage a few islands for supplies and make my way towards Paradise. For now, all I have is a ship and a few rag tag members but nothing solid. The only known Nox Pirates are myself and my mentor, Newport which is perfect for now.” Castor responded, raising his glass to clack against Brood’s own in a celebratory fashion.

“As for Paradise itself, I still need to do some research. I’m unfamiliar with the sea routes or the dynamics of power there. However, a little Kingdom called Flevance not too far from Lvneel possesses a merchant culture I can capitalize on. I’ll be hiding out there for a bit.” Castor concluded, dodging several droplets of Brood’s drool, allowing them to phase through his body using his logia’s perks.  

The topic of Silver defeating them came up once more. Castor almost crushed his cup in frustration but opted not to, accepting the bitter reality that he’d simply lost. Sighing, “I failed as well. My initial plan was having The Feral Pirates owe me a favor. Perfect leverage for a rainy day but that dream’s gone. I’ll build my strength up slowly, Gashi Gashi.” Castor concluded, transitioning into a nervous laugh after.

Waiting for Brood’s response to his immediate plans, Castor would time the action in downing the cup’s contents. After the Sake had been consumed, the new alliance would be solidified on the darken soils of Thriller Bark.


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Name : Brood X. Bach
Epithet : Mushiba (Tooth-Decay)
Age : 28
Height : 6'3"
Weight : 190 lbs
Species : Human
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Blockbuster
Alliance : Nox Prime
Crew : P.T.S.D.
Ship : The Dead Air
Crew Role : Chairman
Devil Fruit : Amai Amai no Mi
Haki Level : 7
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Hitpoints (HP) : 380
Attack (ATK) : 525
Defense (DEF) : 350
Reflex (RX) : 510
Willpower (WP) : 400
Level : 70
Experience Points : 7039
Bounty : 355,000,000
Income Multiplier : +10%
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Thu Feb 25, 2021 4:59 pm







OOC: (-eh is a cough; -ee is a weeze)

Somewhere In Thriller Bark

"This is Sunflower, reporting in. Looks like the boys couldn't handle the big fish. Want me to move in and neutralize the targets?" A figure noted with a deep and sensual sounding voice.

This man silhouetted in stark black found himself leering from a window far from the party being waged between the two soon-to-be Blockbusters. Eyes glaring towards the flaming wreckage out on the waters.

It was not clear how long he had been watching, but there was something about this man that allowed him to be unnoticed by Brood and his superior Observation Haki, though what that something was... wasn't exactly clear in the here and now.

The shadow figure spoke into a den den mushi located on his wrist and through the silence cut an ominous voice that sounded as though it oozed with both authority and malice. "We have it on good authority that the sugar ability-user is the weaker of the two. Track him down when he leaves the West Blue. Do not act until you are sure you can capture him."

For a brief moment there was silence and then the mysterious stranger replied to the disembodied voice. Sounding like a mix between a lecherous pervert and someone born of noble stock.

"Ooof course, Darling~. I'll figure out where he is headed... But I might not capture him alive... if that's alright with you."

There would be no response as the den den mushi made a clicking noise. The mysterious man would look out over the blaze for a brief moment more... and then back away into the shadows, he'd be gone.



Brood nodded, deciding to down his drink at the same time as Castor. His thoughts focusing on what the future would hold for the pair, especially given the fact that Castor had admitted that he hadn't found himself yet in the Grand Line. It was no mistake that things in that sea were far more turbulent than they were here, but Brood honestly believed that Castor was more than strong enough to achieve success there.

No... what worried Brood was what laid beyond the Grand Line. His own time there had been filled with turmoil, since he had went there far earlier than he was ready to. It was why he had lost most of his crew... all except for Desmond Wilkes.

He at least could be thankful that Big Dirty was alive and well. Not that he could say the same for those who put their faith in him to lead them to victory. But Brood believed vehemently that disaster bred opportunity. His current crew was far stronger than anything he had devised in the past. He knew of some upstart pirates making their way through the North Blue and through the Grand Line that he was going to hunt down and offer a chance to join his little organization.

And it was all thanks to that man. If you could even call a rat a man, at least.

Brood peered into the eyes of his newfound comrade, a large grin growing on his face all the while. "This is eh-wonderful. Now-ee I don't have to ee-hunt you down in the Grand Line-ee should my employers-eh desire such an outcome-ee. I think this is the start of a eh-very mutually beneficial-eh relationship." He exclaimed in a proud tone of voice. Raising his cup high above his head.

He took a moment to wave it around excitedly before lowering it back down to his lips. Frowning upon realization that he had gulped it all down so quickly.

"I open-eh my services to you ee-free of ee-charge, now that we are brothers! Since you'll be the eh-king of a nation. It's not suspicious-ee if you you were to inquire into my eh-services. Keeping our cover in tact-ee." He puffed out his chest. Seemingly excited that all of his planning and plotting was coming together. Especially given the fact that he hadn't exactly gone out of his way to ensure that any of these things would work out. He wasn't exactly the best at handling negotiations. Which was the primary reason that he sought the employment of an negotiator.

Brood thought to himself for a brief moment, wondering if he had any advice for Castor and his trip into the perilous Grand Line. There hadn't been any specific incidents that occurred to Brood right away. Researching the Grand Line was probably the best bet, but most of the issues that Brood faced there had little to do with culture, politics or geography. He just managed to run afoul of the worst people that you could have met.

His high bounty put him directly in the sights of a pretty strong Bounty Hunter and his own failure to rescue his crewmate was enough of a situation to give Brood doubt. Tearing through the North Blue was child's play.

But sometimes people had to force themselves to grow up.

"Your best ee-bet in the Grand Line is to never-eh underestimate an oppo-ee-nent. That's about all the eh-advice I can give." Hesitation could lead to death. Which was why Brood's master beat it into his head that he had to do everything in his power to achieve victory as fast as possible.

Brood was a firm believer in the all-or-nothing approach to combat now-a-days.

"Best to ee-contemplate these things eh when you're ee-sober! Eeeheheeehehee!" Brood's coughing fit brought smiles and cheering from his crew. It was rare for their captain to laugh after-all. This prompted his crew to whip themselves up into a frenzy almost immediately. As they started to pop open barrel after barrel of sake, letting the liquid flow.

His musicians started to play their instruments and some of his crew started to dance. Plenty of beauties had tagged along for the entertainment as well. Dancing and acting like proper hostesses while Brood's eyes narrowed. His attention now solely focused on the man across from him.

"Feel-eh free to ee-partake in whatever-ee you desire tonight-eh. Tomorrow we will eh-go our separate-ee ways. Take this..." He spoke casually as he handed the box from earlier over to Sanpaku.

Inside of it, there was a den den mushi.

"Eh-keep it somewhere ee-safe and somewhere private. We ee-will only communicate through-eh that one. So that-ee we can eh-keep up appearances-ee. I will be sending one of my crew to aid you-ee if you're ever nearby-ee enough. Consider it an eh-acknowledgement of-ee our agreement." If anyone failed to see what exactly Brood got out of this entire deal, they were not looking at the bigger picture.

Castor had the most potential to become a Yonko out of anyone he had ever met. Which meant that he'd be able to take out a Yonko someday and that event would allow for Brood to prosper more than any who failed to make such an investment early.

But only time would tell how far Castor would rise within this brave new world.

Brood began to slobber as he ceased his feeble attempts to prevent such an outcome. "Enough business! Let's party!!" He started to holler aloud as one of his more bottom-heavy crew lasses came over, plopping a chair so that Brood could be seated comfortably. She'd slip onto his lap, hanging off him as he started to cough endless. His laugh a haunting mixture of glee and pain.

And boy did Brood love the pain.

Turning his attention towards the large castle in the distance, Brood swore for a moment he felt something watching him. But the feeling had vanished as fast as it had arrived. He decided that it was best to not allow himself to worry about prying eyes for now. If anyone was dumb enough to be here, they'd face the same consequences that he had just given the Bounty Hunters that tried to capture this pair moments ago.

All that mattered now was entertaining his guest. He had hoped that Castor could relax and enjoy himself. But this wasn't the time to be letting their guards down either. Soon they'd have to head off and achieve their dreams. If people already managed to track them down here. it was best not to be partying out until the early morning of the next day.

So then the only solution was simple. Party hard and party fast. Something that Brood X. Bach excelled at more than most men.

It was a claim to fame.

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Age : 49
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Weight : 1043 lbs / 473 kg
Species : Human Cyborg
Faction : Pirate
World Position : Lurking Legend (Former Yonkou)
Crew : Black Fist Pirates (Destroyed)
Ship : Sangria's Vane (Destroyed)
Crew Role : Captain (Former)
Devil Fruit : Pressure-Pressure Fruit
Haki Level : 9
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Hitpoints (HP) : 750
Attack (ATK) : 800
Defense (DEF) : 600
Reflex (RX) : 715
Willpower (WP) : 650
Level : 100
Prestige : 8
Experience Points : 18000
Bounty : 5,000,000,000
EXP Multiplier : +10%
Income Multiplier : +20%
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Tue Jul 13, 2021 7:12 pm

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Brood X. Bach:

+ [It wasn't like the man was known for ruthlessly slaughtering children or anything of that nature.] Love the gut punch in the very first post. Lmao. Classic Broody.

+ [...the sugary human would have [retired] early. Spending the rest of his days a moping drunk in a bar that lacked the firepower necessary to remove him from the premises. Fate had plans for the burly monster...and it was time for the morose mastodon...] I know you love coming up with fun nicknames (and I truly do love your fun nicknames too), but, you should try and space out their use a bit more. As cool and creative as they are, overusing distinct nicknames in such a short span of text can derail your narrative flow. Overusing different nicknames - especially when doing so for multiple characters in the same interaction - can make it trickier to keep track of characters in some cases. This effect isn't as noticeable when you're reading a single post, but, the effect is compounded when reading a batch of posts consecutively. It is okay to refer to Brood as "Brood" most of the time.

+ [...and his nice dress that seemed to hug his hips and showcase he small feminine frame perfectly.] LOL

+ [Still, that did not detract from the potential advantages of the pair working together, something that didn't work out so well in their first actual fight alongside one another, but something that certainly made sense given that both were arguably the most ferocious and feared up-and-comers from the North Blue. An announcement that they joined forces would likely even gain the attention of a Yonko, Brood would surmise. But that wasn't exactly the only benefit that such an alliance would provide Xaldin. No, what he wanted more than anything else was recognition from the World Government. If he was considered a viable threat, then he could do a task to prove himself to the Government at large and become a Shichibukai. Letting his mercenary company operate without hassle.] Though I know it can sometimes be tricky, exposition like this should be doled out in small doses and spread out across a thread. Dialogue is an excellent way to deliver exposition while also engaging characters simultaneously. This paragraph reads more like an essay on Brood's plans. Alternatively, you could add some introspection to the narrative - a few words on what's motivating Brood to make such plans.

+ [He was indeed curious and since the two captains would be having to represent each other in the future, with each decision their crews made reflecting on the other, it was no wonder that Brood needed to figure out what that man was going to be doing.] Try and avoid sentences this long. It's better to break them into parts.

+ [He started to drool out the sides of mouth, given that he was resisting the urge to cough and wheeze.] Just cough, bro. Better out than in.

+ [The fact that he felt the need to quantify his own craziness in comparison with Brood, as though it were some form of competition, was appalling to the sugar bandit.] I see Brood is pettier than even you and me. LOL

+ [His drooling began to become far more furious now, given that he'd not bother to strain himself in order to not do so. ] I think I started drooling from a stroke trying to read this sentence.

+ [A popping noise from his neck occurred as he leaned his head from left to right. ] "His neck popped loudly..." would be shorter and sweeter in this instance. Try to simplify sentences where possible. Little changes like this add up and improve the readability of your posts.

+ [But he did note that [the strongest] person was closer to Castor. A shame really, but not too big of a deal.] Oh, I thought Brood was serious when he said "Dibs on the weaker one!"

+ [This individual seemed to be an animal that Brood had never encountered, but one thing was for certain. It wasn't a dog or monkey for it was gray and held a singular horn that came out of it's face. Unbeknownst to Brood, the man that stood opposite of him, armored in gold plate and holding a mighty halberd, was none other than a Rhinoceros Mink.] A rhinoceros mink shouldn't be a first for Brood. Brood was only pretending to be unconscious when he and Castor were rescued by Rusty Horns - a rhino mink. But, I supposed you didn't explicitly say he hadn't seen a rhino mink before; only that he hadn't seen a rhino.

+ While Salazar being a rhino mink and a rhino fruit user was a fun twist, he felt too much like a throwaway baddie (which, I suppose he is). I think you could've made him more interesting by showing his opinion on recent events. He could have either been conflicted over attacking those who helped his brethren (even if only for money) or been spiteful for Brood having helped those who turned him into an outcast. Either way, it's a missed opportunity.

+ I liked seeing Brood resorting to cheap tactics when he tricked Salazar. It's a good reflection of him embracing a mentality that might prevent the loss of his crew this time.

+ [Though he managed to generate enough sand so that he fell onto a mound of it, just inches before becoming submerged.] Ah yes, Brood X. Bach, the sand human.

+ I really appreciate how you've been breaking up your paragraphs now. No more mind-numbingly long blocks of text!

+ I liked the shadowy figure foreshadowing in the final post. Looking forward to seeing what that's all about.

+ [He knew of some upstart pirates making their way through the North Blue and through the Grand Line that he was going to hunt down and offer a chance to join his little organization.

And it was all thanks to that man. If you could even call a rat a man, at least.] Trying to figure out who you were referencing here.

Castor O. Nox:

+ [Castor rode on his electric bird Kwane] Say what now? Let's retcon the whole electric bird thing, please. It's okay to shape an electrical attack like a bird, but, let's not break the fruit so far as to ride it. If you want a big-ass pet bird, get a big-ass pet bird. I think we discussed that if you want to do long-distance travel with your devil fruit, it would have to be, in effect, similar to Doffy's. Castor may conduct himself through and between clouds (doesn't even have to be rain clouds) to travel through the sky. You should also remember to add that ability as a passive in your fighting style the next time you edit it.

+ [...Anywho, enough of my ramblings Tooth-Decay...] Yes, please, enough of his ramblings. This was a case of "too much dialogue". I mentioned to Broody that exposition should be done through dialogue when possible, but, not to this extent. If you have to do shorter posts to have more back and forths between the two characters, that is acceptable. That is the main reason why I replaced post requirements for quests with total word requirements.

+ Castor's narration didn't acknowledge Brood's coughing and odd behaviour at all. While Castor may be used to weirdos, you not bringing it up even once makes me think you just forgot that Brood constantly coughs, wheezes, and drools like a dying man.

+ [ I would’ve had some wine on your behalf… and disappeared!] I think the phrase you're looking for here is "at your expense", not "on your behalf".

+ [Placing his hand on the deck, the Imp began to electrify the ship’s deck, causing it to collapse.] For future reference, running a powerful electric current through wood would likely set it ablaze.

+ [...'certain' underworld brokers would be very happy in seeing your demise.] Nice tie-in to a previous quest!

+ [Gilligan declared, before whistling, using the gaps in his scaly hand to beckon the sea creatures below. Surfacing, about three smaller sea kings with containers strapped to their backs, each carry weights, the cornerstone of Gilligan’s fighting style.] Gonna retcon those creatures being sea kings. Controlling/taming Sea Kings is a power only belonging to Poseidon (as far as we know). We'll just say they're Sea Beasts like Momoo.

+ [ I can stay in the air for days if need be] You can stay in clouds for days. Electricity can't just float in the air.

+ I would've liked to see you guys explore how the Flamelight Organization knew Brood and Castor were about to form an alliance. I could see this having gone at least two different ways.

One, they had no idea those two were gonna ally - in which case, their assumption should have been that the two pirates were gonna duke it out and that they should let it happen and swoop in for easier kills. Brood briefly brings up this idea with his boss when he cons him, but, it could've been brought up beforehand as well from the antagonists' perspective.

And two, they had spies in one of your crews (or both) - in which case, you should've explored that idea and initiated a hunt for the spy. I saw a brief mention of an "informant" from your boss - this should have been made into a bigger deal after the fight.


+ [Castor O. Nox uses [HT] Awakened Status on Gilligan] You're using these techniques on yourself, not the opponent. You're not supposed to roll dice for self-targeting techniques.

+ [Lip service is often better than printed press.] You used "lip service" incorrectly here. This phrase is exclusively used to refer to shit-talk that isn't backed up by actions.

+ [Beginning to flee towards the open seas, the thick miasma around Thriller Bark] I hope you realise that the "thick miasma" around Thriller Bark when Straw Hats visited it was because of the Florian Triangle. Not because of the island ship itself.

+ [Castor concluded, dodging several droplets of Brood’s drool, allowing them to phase through his body using his logia’s perks. ] That's rude. Don't be a little bitch. You can handle some spit flying at you from your new brother.


When you rolled all of your dice rolls beforehand, I was hoping it meant I wouldn't have to slog through tedious combat. I wish you guys had cut your boss fights shorter. There were still too many unnecessary back-and-forths with no interesting developments (minus the rhino mink being a rhino fruit user). In times like this, it'd be good to have another plot point you can follow to cut away from boring action.

I was also hoping to see you guys actually make use of and explore the island of Thriller Bark some more. At this point, it might as well have been some random nameless island. I did appreciate the mention of the symbolism of forming a long-term alliance on an island that had seen the place you were trying to conquer.



REWARDS

Brood X. Bach:

Difficulty Bonus: +50% (+2)
Quality Bonus: +200% (S)
Length Bonus: 1.80 (9,024 words)
EXP Multiplier: +10% (Castor's Punchout Guru)
Income Multiplier: +10%
Apology Bonus: +100% (For the long wait)

EXP: +414 (1.8*50)*(1+0.5+2.0+0.1+1)
Berries: +144,900,000 (1.8*70*250k)*(1+0.5+2.0+0.1+1)
Bounty: +30,000,000 | {For massacring all the bounty hunters (especially with "Bittersweet Ending").}



Old EXP: 6625
Updated EXP: 7039

Old balance: 1,650,000
Updated balance: 146,550,000

Old bounty: 325,000,000
Updated bounty: 355,000,000


Castor O. Nox:

Difficulty Bonus: +0% (+0)
Quality Bonus: +200% (S)
Length Bonus: 1.00 (5,186 words)
EXP Multiplier: +10%
Income Multiplier: +10%
Apology Bonus: +100% (For the long wait)

EXP: +205 (1.0*50)*(1+0+2.0+0.1+1)
Berries: +82,000,000 (1.0*80*250k)*(1+0+2.0+0.1+1)
Bounty: +0 | {Castor's bounty is already too high for the blues.}



Old EXP: 8000
Updated EXP: 8000 (EXP redirected to Sabian)

Old balance: 102,584,688
Updated balance: 184,584,688

Old bounty: 480,000,000
Updated bounty: 480,000,000





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